Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Many people often argue that, dissatisfaction in current job as well as deficite of money should be taken to consideration as a fate of challenging situation where other gives different openion as, it is better to try hard and change such situation positively in own favour. In this essay, i will depicts both point of view and finally conclude with my personal thoughts in favour of hard work to get rid of poor situations.

Overall, on one hand, people with traditional belief always brings their fate to blame for bad situation, such as unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. On the other, hard working people appreciate to try their level best to get rid of such situation which matches my own perspective of knowledge and experience.

People tend to blame their luck for all the negative things that happen to them as a result of their misunderstand that everything is not in their hand, bad situations are act of God and they can not change their fate. All they can do is to accept their fate and try to cope up with the situation.

Other people with greatest motivation always try to help themselves focusing on how to get rid of such situation. They bring discipline to their work and improvize their skills by giving extra effort to acheive their goal which ultimately bring success to them.

I strongly think, fate can be changed through patience, hardwork and discipline to their work. If we always depend on our fate nothing can help us to get out of it, while trying our level best toward our goal can ensure success over the period of time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and make your preference clear: the opening and conclusion support trying to improve difficult circumstances. The discussion of acceptance explains that some people see hardship as fate and try to cope, while the other view is linked to discipline and skill development. However, these ideas remain general and are not supported with a specific example or much explanation of how improvement might work in an unsatisfactory job or during financial hardship. The opening also frames the issue mainly as fate, which narrows the task’s focus on accepting a bad situation. Develop each view with a concrete example and explain the likely benefits or limitations before reinforcing your opinion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a concluding opinion. Basic signposting such as “on one hand,” “on the other,” and “I strongly think” helps readers follow the main direction. However, progression is limited: the second paragraph largely previews points that are repeated in the body, and the ideas within paragraphs are not always linked clearly. For example, the move from people blaming luck to “bad situations are act of God” is abrupt, and the final body paragraph lists discipline, skills, and effort without showing how these connect. Reduce repetition and use clearer cause-and-effect links and references between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “fate,” “cope,” “discipline,” “motivation,” and “achieve their goal.” This gives you enough language to communicate the main ideas, but the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make the writing less natural. Examples include “taken to consideration as a fate,” “appreciate to try,” and “bring discipline to their work.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, such as “deficite,” “openion,” “improvize,” and “acheive.” Aim to learn common topic collocations and check spelling and word forms carefully; more precise phrasing would make your argument easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “as,” “while,” and “which,” but complex structures are often faulty and errors occur frequently. For instance, “people with traditional belief always brings” has problems with number agreement, while “bad situations are act of God” is missing an article. The opening sentence is difficult to follow because its clauses are joined and punctuated inaccurately, and “In this essay, i will depicts” combines an incorrect verb form with an uncapitalised pronoun. These errors sometimes make the reader work to understand the intended meaning. Practise building shorter, accurate sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check agreement, articles, verb forms, and punctuation.

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