Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-07-24
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
In this topic their are two types of opinions like some are believe to accept the reality whatever we are facing so that we will not be hurt more.While others are totaly against of it they say that we should learn from unfortunies and faliours and never give up .This is the time to improve yourself more and make more and more stong .
To begine with ,this is a reality that when a person completely involved in some tasks they emotionally attached withem .They try hard and make sure to give their best in all kind of circumstanances
.But when they donot get their desirable result so, sensitive people they get hurt and most of them stop living their lives . Therefore,some people advicing them that we should learn how to let it go ,how can we cope up with this big emotional ,physical and mental. Instead of having more negativity we should accept the reality that we dont have that much capacity .For exaple a person tried to make his business successfull but all his efferts become vain so he sould accept that this is not his piece of cake .
On the other hand ,some argue that we should learn from our mistakes as a lesson and never give up , never be trade off on your goals ,be motivated .
In conclusion ,both sides have stong arues and both have their own opinions .however, i strongly in favour of that we should not give on our goals
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments are presented in a very general way without sufficient supporting evidence or detailed explanation. For instance, the example of a business failure is brief and does not fully illustrate the complexity of the 'accepting a bad situation' perspective. To improve, you should expand on your points with more specific examples or logical reasoning to reach the depth required for higher bands.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'To begine with' and 'Therefore,some people advicing them'. There is a lack of smooth transitions between sentences, and some ideas feel disjointed. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult to follow the logical progression of the argument. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words will significantly enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The range of vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are several spelling errors, such as 'unfortunies', 'faliours', 'stong', 'begine', and 'efferts'. Additionally, some word choices are unnatural or incorrect, such as 'trade off on your goals' and 'piece of cake' (which is an idiom used incorrectly here). To achieve a higher score, you need to work on using more precise vocabulary and ensuring correct spelling and collocation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'some are believe'), missing articles, and incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'some people advicing them'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at complex sentences often contain errors. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing after commas and periods. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common grammatical slips will help improve your accuracy.
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