Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Some people think facing problem related of unsatisfactory job or shortage of money is good thing because they learn lots of things in that particular time. Also other think that it is bad for learning new thing because they want to focus on improvement of worst situation. They accept the worst time at time they know about who is support in that kind of situation as well as some people try to improve that situation. I believe that focus on improvement because in our worst time know one can support us.

While people accept their worst situation they may learn lots of thing. They learn how the academic background is important for choosing of any kind of job. Moreover skill is also important for taking any kind of job. In that phase they learn who are helping them as well as their parents do not support them in their worst time. Also, this time learn how to face problem without money. For instance, when student complete their bachelors after that they facing problem related unsatisfactory job or shortage of money problem.

While they think why every problem is on my head rather than focus on how to leave out that problem or improve that worst situation. Also, at time they have focus on enhancing of their skill or knowledge relate their study or work. It will beneficial for them. For example, student must have focus on their skills in their college time rather than focusing on other thing.

In my point of they applies some rule and regulation for improvement of their work or study. It may have advantage of their future. They improve their life style as well as their family background.

To sum up, in acceptance of worst situation may helpful for learning new thing in that particular phase. Although, they have focus on enhancing their knowledge or skill in particular filed.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both views and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the prompt. However, the development of ideas is limited and often repetitive. For instance, the argument that accepting a bad situation leads to learning is mentioned but not clearly explained or supported with logical depth. The examples provided, such as students completing a bachelor's degree, are somewhat vague and do not fully illustrate the points being made. To reach a higher band, you should focus on providing more specific, well-developed examples and ensuring that each paragraph clearly supports your central thesis.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is frequently interrupted by unclear phrasing and awkward transitions. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'For instance', they are often used mechanically or incorrectly, which makes the flow of ideas feel disjointed. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'at time they have focus', which makes it difficult for the reader to follow the argument. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each sentence flows naturally from the previous one will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms like 'bad', 'good', and 'problem'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'leave out that problem' instead of 'overcome that problem' or 'relate their study' instead of 'related to their study'. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of precision and the reliance on simple vocabulary restrict the range. To improve, try to incorporate more academic collocations and synonyms to express your ideas with greater accuracy and variety.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure. For example, 'Some people think facing problem related of unsatisfactory job' contains multiple errors in prepositions and articles. Complex sentence structures are attempted but are often faulty, leading to confusion. While the meaning is usually understandable, the persistent errors in basic grammar and punctuation impede the overall fluency of the text. Focusing on mastering simple, error-free sentences before attempting more complex structures will help improve your accuracy.

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