Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-05
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
In morden time, humanbiegn pass the bad bad situation and not accept but try to solve so at that time people more knowlagwe about it and improve their self. Number of individuals thinking that it is best way to accept a bad time such as an unsatisfactory job or shortages of money.others argue that it is not better way but ones time we are to try and improve such situations. I firmly stand to given second statement and the reason for my stand will analyzed further.
A ones time bad situation get to human life because it is more and more improv to human and learn to how to solve this type of thing. For instance People are all time hard work in onw companies and suddenly thei family member is's sireos angery and at that time doctor said that you can not arenze paticular money so I am no start opprestaion and at that time people give up this situation so they lost their family member but they are try to bast and arenze money so at that time pass the bed thing and not loss their family. As result bad situation some benifical for people and lern to new things to related.
First statement of some type of true main reason is people not accept bad thing so they can lost their golden life. For instance people are pass the collage and placment to one compnies at that time othars compni to creat oppporchhunities so mastly at that time people can hardly work in it compaines na dit's compain not provaid enghof saleary so people not mangent their home and you are thiunk last think susaid.Therefore bad situation accept more benfites for individuals.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address both views and provide an opinion, but the ideas are frequently unclear and difficult to follow. While you state your position in the introduction, the supporting arguments in the body paragraphs are disjointed and lack logical development. For example, the anecdote about the doctor and the family member is confusing and does not effectively support the argument that one should try to improve a bad situation. The second body paragraph is also difficult to interpret, making it hard to identify a coherent argument. To improve, focus on clearly stating one main idea per paragraph and supporting it with logical, easy-to-follow examples.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a clear structure. While there are paragraph breaks, the progression of ideas is not logical. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as 'As result' or 'Therefore', which do not accurately link the preceding ideas to the conclusions drawn. Referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of the argument. To improve, use transition words like 'furthermore', 'however', or 'consequently' more accurately and ensure that each sentence builds logically upon the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate, which frequently impedes communication. Many words are misspelled or misused, such as 'morden' instead of 'modern', 'humanbiegn' instead of 'human beings', and 'arenze' instead of 'arrange'. There is a lack of variety, and the phrasing is often unnatural, making it difficult to grasp the intended meaning. To improve, focus on learning the correct spelling of common words and expanding your vocabulary by reading academic texts and noting how words are used in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
There is a high frequency of grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement, tense usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, such as 'For instance People are all time hard work in onw companies and suddenly thei family member is's sireos angery'. These errors make the text very difficult to read. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures—subject, verb, and object—before attempting more complex sentences. Proofreading for basic punctuation and verb tense consistency is also essential.
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