Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In todays rapidly changing of world many aspects of human life are evolving signifcantly. Some people think that it is better to accept bad situation as compare to unsatisfactroy job or less money and other belive that it is good to try and improve such situations. This essay will examine to views before giving own opinion.

Firstly,Most of people thought that it is good think to accept any bad news like if someone prepraing their ilets and he give mock test but not get their desire band . In this way he donot need to give up because its her first try and they more effrots then they able to do it. Moreover, if anyone try agian and agian then at the end they can get their dream if they give up at the mid then are not able for it So prepration is compalsary . If they are comfortable and motivate then they achive their prize after a long trying. Wheares some people practcing agian and again and at the last they ready for their situation

Secondly, some people think that accept any bad news rather then try agian and agian because they not try for better job or money . For example if you are studying in a private school so it devolpe their experiance for their next step . If you are say private school have less salary and not try this then you are not able for their next step. You need to take step by youself if you wanted to achiving professional job in life and it also need hardworking. In my opinion, it best think try and hardwork then you are able to achive their goal in life rather accept any bad situation.

To summarise it, this essay show two views that some people happy at any bad situation rather trying for better. On the other hand if they trying hard then able for any task so they need to take their step because in the first they have to face problems then they have to see many achivements.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both views and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the prompt. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent and often unclear. For instance, the argument regarding accepting bad news is confusingly linked to IELTS preparation, and the second paragraph struggles to articulate why one should avoid accepting unsatisfactory jobs. The ideas are often repetitive and lack logical depth, making it difficult for the reader to follow the reasoning. To improve, you should focus on clearly stating your position in the introduction and ensuring each body paragraph contains a distinct, well-supported argument rather than fragmented thoughts.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. While some cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Moreover', and 'To summarise' are used, they are often applied mechanically or incorrectly. Referencing is frequently unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the transition between private school experience and professional goals is disjointed. The flow of ideas is hampered by grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, which makes the relationship between sentences difficult to follow. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each sentence builds logically upon the previous one will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, which restricts the ability to convey complex ideas. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'signifcantly', 'prepraring', 'compalsary', and 'devolpe'. Many phrases are used inaccurately, such as 'achive their prize' or 'able for it'. While the meaning is generally discernible, the lack of precision and the high frequency of spelling errors prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. You should focus on learning collocations and expanding your vocabulary related to work and personal development to express your ideas more naturally and accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently marred by grammatical errors. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Most of people thought'), tense usage, and article omission. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing commas and incorrect sentence boundaries. For example, 'If they are comfortable and motivate then they achive their prize after a long trying' contains multiple errors that impede the clarity of the sentence. To improve, you need to focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb forms and consistent tense usage before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

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