Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this modern era everyone not get

the job are favourite work or wealthy life

for that you have to work hard, a number

of individual believe that if you

work hard bad days also gone, for

that you have to compromise your sleep.

Some people belive that endorse the negative

condition moreover other belive

that put effort to enhance the context

for this state my opinion given in the

trail paragraph.

on the first hand Individual argue that

agree to detrimental condition is only option.

They thin that you have to live life according

to condition. Spend money according to need

if you have money shortage. also

some jobs are boring but for live a life

you have to do. for improve condition they

do not compromise with their comfortable lifestyle.

on the other hand Individual belive they

put some effort to enhance the context

is good. They try to improve life style.

for that they have to work hard and

they are ready for that also they readyto compromise their peaceful life. they belive

for improve condition hard work is

Crucial, also for money you have

to do uncomfortable job

If you work hard and show your potential

then you definitely archive high paid job

then you improve your life style. If you

not do then no cuts no lux

no coconuts.

In conclusion, I agree with try to

improve condition because if you do not

try to enhance condition you do not

comfortable life. Without accepting the

bad condition you should think and

try about how you improve that.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments are repetitive and lack specific, well-supported examples. For instance, the discussion on 'money shortage' and 'boring jobs' remains superficial. To improve, you should expand on your points by explaining the 'why' and 'how' behind your reasoning, rather than just stating the situation. The conclusion is present but lacks a summary of the main points discussed in the body paragraphs. The overall position is clear, but the depth of analysis is insufficient for a higher band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is often hindered by unclear phrasing and a lack of effective cohesive devices. While you use transition words like 'on the first hand' and 'in conclusion', they are often used incorrectly or are non-standard. The referencing is sometimes confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of your argument. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'nevertheless') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through your argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, which restricts your ability to express complex ideas. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'endorse the negative condition' and 'no cuts no lux no coconuts', which are not appropriate for an academic essay. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle to use less common lexical items accurately. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning collocations and using more precise academic vocabulary to describe situations and actions, rather than relying on informal or vague expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'everyone not get'), sentence structure, and missing articles. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, making the text difficult to parse. While you attempt to use some complex structures, they are often inaccurate. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction—ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb—before attempting more complex grammatical forms. Proofreading for basic errors like missing 'to be' verbs and incorrect verb tenses will also be highly beneficial.

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