Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In order to live and carry out our lives everyone need a stable source of income. While some people believe that they should except their fate and continue to work on less wages other believes that they should try, learn a skill and improve their standards of living. This essay will discuss both views and I believe
every human needs a stable source of income to support their families and there are a lot of people who take advantage of this thing. Because a person has not the time to apply for jobs and seek through it they continue to work under lesser money and all
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under-length at only 106 words, failing to meet the 250-word minimum requirement. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. While the introduction attempts to outline the two views, the essay stops abruptly before developing the arguments or providing a clear, supported opinion. The ideas are severely underdeveloped, and the prompt's requirement to discuss both views and provide an opinion is not fulfilled due to the incomplete nature of the text. To improve, you must expand on your points with specific examples and ensure you complete all parts of the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay is too short to demonstrate effective paragraphing or a logical progression of ideas. While there is a basic attempt to introduce the topic, the text ends mid-sentence, which prevents the development of a coherent argument. Cohesive devices are minimal, and the lack of structure makes it difficult to follow the intended flow of the essay. To achieve a higher score, you need to organize your response into clear paragraphs—an introduction, body paragraphs for each viewpoint, and a conclusion—using linking words to connect your ideas logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, such as 'stable source of income' and 'improve their standards of living'. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'except their fate' (should be 'accept') and 'work on less wages' (should be 'work for lower wages'). The range of vocabulary is limited, which restricts your ability to express complex ideas precisely. To improve, focus on learning collocations and synonyms related to work and financial situations, and ensure you proofread for common spelling and word-choice errors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The text contains several grammatical errors that hinder clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('everyone need', 'other believes') and awkward phrasing ('Because a person has not the time to apply for jobs and seek through it'). The sentence structures are simple, and there is a lack of complex grammatical forms. The abrupt ending also leaves the final sentence incomplete. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and practice using a variety of complex sentence structures, such as conditional sentences or relative clauses, while ensuring your grammar remains accurate.
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