Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-14
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Eveory one deserve a better job according to their intrest as well according to their knowledge. it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisified job and according to some people it is better to try and improve such situstions. in this essay i will disuss both views and as well i will explain my opinion.
some people believe that it is better to accept a bad situations such as the job in which they are not intrested or shorted of money. every one deserve better future and as well better salary depends on their job or work. For intance a fectory worker can not do their 100% if the organization manader or organization authorties are not paying him according to his work. they should struggle in their future for their life.
On the other hand some people think that the argue is better to try and improve such condotions. obviousely working for improvement is one of the best way of successful life or a better future. every body is working and struddling to achieve their life gole. improvement in the work is one of the best way to achieve the gole. For intance i am working with an organization i can not achieve my aim when i will improve in such situation.
In my opinion, i believe that every body should improve in such situations. every one deserve a better future in todays world a comfortable life is impossible with out money. every organization worker or an employment do not accept these bad situations or shortage because they also deserve a comfortable life. if ther are doing their 100% for an organization they also deserve a better salary or pay.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The essay addresses both views and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited. For example, the argument for accepting a bad situation is underdeveloped, relying on a single, somewhat unclear example of a factory worker. The explanation of why one should improve their situation is also repetitive and lacks depth. While the prompt is addressed, the ideas are not fully extended or supported with sophisticated reasoning. To improve, you should provide more detailed explanations and concrete examples that clearly illustrate the logic behind each perspective, ensuring that your arguments are fully explored rather than just stated.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'For intance' and 'On the other hand' are used, but the transitions between sentences within paragraphs are frequently abrupt or confusing. For instance, the sentence 'i can not achieve my aim when i will improve in such situation' is logically unclear and disrupts the flow of the argument. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words more naturally and ensure that each sentence logically follows from the previous one to create a smoother progression of ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, which restricts the ability to convey complex ideas. There are frequent spelling errors such as 'Eveory', 'intrest', 'situstions', 'fectory', 'manader', 'authorties', 'struddling', and 'gole'. These errors are noticeable and occasionally make the text difficult to read. The range of vocabulary is basic, and there is little attempt to use less common or more precise academic language. To improve, you should focus on learning the correct spelling of common words and expanding your vocabulary to include more sophisticated synonyms and collocations relevant to the topic of employment and personal development.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('every one deserve'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are simple or contain errors that impede clarity, such as 'the argue is better to try and improve such condotions'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with frequent missing capital letters at the start of sentences and incorrect use of commas. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and consistent capitalization before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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