Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
From my opinion a person who is suffering from shortage of money should do an unsatisfactory job. Because the shortage of money will decrease his confidence level. He will be always stay in trauma. From where will the money be provided for the expenses of his family. Moreover he should not perform the unsatisfactory job for full time. But he can do it for part time. So he can be possible for managing his expenses and can give time to himself. After he starts earning from his unsatisfactory job, he will able to know about the tough time. So that he can work hard in upcoming time for his improvement. When the financial condition of the family becomes stable then the person can seo resignation from him job. Although from the unsatisfactory job he came to know about the efforts persons are facing in their jobs. So he will be motivated from that job efforts and can work hard for improvement in his future. By doing this a person can help himself to improve from such adverse situation. A person will be able to fulfill his dream by achieving his dreams from his hardwork.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to address the task requirements adequately. First, it is significantly under the 250-word minimum, which limits the depth of the argument. Second, the prompt asks to discuss both views (accepting a bad situation vs. trying to improve it) and provide an opinion. You focused almost exclusively on the benefits of taking an unsatisfactory job, failing to discuss the alternative perspective of those who argue for active improvement or change. The ideas are repetitive and lack the necessary development to reach a higher band. To improve, ensure you address all parts of the prompt equally and provide a clear, structured argument that meets the length requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a clear structure. It is written as a single block of text rather than using paragraphs to separate the introduction, body, and conclusion. While there are some attempts at cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'Although', they are often used incorrectly or do not logically connect the ideas. The progression of thought is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow your argument. To improve, you should organize your essay into distinct paragraphs, each focusing on a specific point, and use a wider variety of linking words to create a smoother flow between sentences.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'unsatisfactory job', 'money', and 'hard work'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'seo resignation' (likely a typo for 'seek') and 'efforts persons are facing'. The range is insufficient to express complex ideas precisely. To reach a higher band, you should aim to incorporate more academic vocabulary and collocations related to the topic of employment and personal development, while ensuring that your word choices are accurate and appropriate for the context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with sentence structure, such as sentence fragments ('Because the shortage of money will decrease his confidence level.') and incorrect verb forms ('he will able to know'). Subject-verb agreement and article usage are also inconsistent. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and proofreading for common errors like tense consistency and word order.
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