Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Numerous individuals believe that accepting a deleterious situation like unsatisfied job or shortage of money is best. Other people give contradicting views that it is good to try and improvein such conditions. Accepting a situation in the time of crisis and working to imrpove has many positive effects on people. In this essay, I will dicuss both views and will give my opinion.

On one hand, many people think that a unsatisfactory job sholud be accepted at the time of financial crisis. It will will not only provides the individuals with mental peace but also gives them confidence to work hard to acheive their goals without being stressed out by their present job. For instance, a person is not at the post he deserves at that point quitting job is not the good option instead he has to secure that job by mainting his work along with working on his skills and education to get a better job because leaving job will make him financially weak.

However, other individuals think that people must keep going with their jobs and try and improve their skills to get the jobs they want to acheive. Improving abilities would play a pivotal role in building confidence and it will also eradicate the societal pressure from the individual. Hence, people will have enough finances to cope with the difficulties and to make beneficial survival in the community without paying in loan to banks and other individuals.

IIn my opinion, living with a unsatisfied job is difficult and at time impossible but working on expertise and developing new skills to improve job opportunities like part time jobs along with unsatisfied job is better than quitting a job.

In conclusion, people must accept the detrimental situations and work in a positive way by accepting the unsatisfied job or poor financial conditions and work hard for the betterment of such conditions. It will not only provide them confidence to cope with difficult situations but also make strong individuals for future.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both views and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat repetitive and lacks depth. For instance, the argument for accepting a job is framed as a way to gain 'mental peace' and 'confidence,' but the explanation remains superficial. The conclusion slightly contradicts the body paragraphs by suggesting that people must 'accept' situations, whereas the body paragraphs focus on 'improving' them. While all parts of the prompt are addressed, the ideas could be more thoroughly supported with more specific, real-world examples rather than general statements about financial crises or societal pressure. The position is consistent, but the logical flow between the two views and the personal stance needs more nuanced articulation.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'On one hand,' 'However,' and 'In conclusion,' which help guide the reader. However, some transitions are mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'Hence, people will have enough finances to cope with the difficulties.' Additionally, there are minor issues with referencing and sentence-level cohesion, such as the repetitive use of 'unsatisfied job' and 'improve.' Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different viewpoints, but the internal structure of the paragraphs could be improved to ensure that each sentence builds more effectively on the previous one.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'unsatisfied job' (should be 'unsatisfying' or 'unsatisfactory') and 'make beneficial survival' (which is unnatural). The student attempts to use some academic vocabulary like 'deleterious,' 'pivotal role,' and 'eradicate,' but these are sometimes used in contexts that feel slightly forced or inaccurate. Spelling errors, such as 'imrpove,' 'dicuss,' and 'sholud,' occur throughout the text. To reach a higher band, the student should focus on using collocations more accurately and avoiding repetitive phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'It will will not only provides'), missing articles (e.g., 'at the post he deserves'), and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'without paying in loan to banks'). While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Punctuation is generally functional, but there are some errors, such as the double 'I' at the start of the third paragraph. A greater focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy would significantly improve the score.

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