Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
diff peoples have diff minset and they all think according to there own mindset it is important to respect there way of thinking because they are not wrong thet are right in there own thoought so we should not hurt them by proving them wrong.
it is not the best way to handlle a situation like this to only accecpt that situatuion and going with the flow of the life some people thinks its write beqcuse in some cases you cant do anything because youre are not in the right situation to do something there both cases shortage of money and unsatified job experiqance are both worst cases because they can lead you toward the poverty only accecptinhg the situation can make you lazy or feel worthless or useless on the other hand, trying is a way ttttto make your life better than it was before i think that a person has to try beasue tryiing is the best solution to over come that issue or shortage, trying help a person to become a better version of him self and helpws him to achive his goals. i want to give an example of my story when iwas in 9th grade and in my fainals i failed in maths and it was board paper so i have to give it again after an year if i just accept that and not try to do anything i could might have failed that subj again but i try very hard and as a result i passed that subj with more that 70% of m,arks
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited. The introduction is largely irrelevant, focusing on the need to respect others' opinions rather than the prompt itself. The body paragraphs attempt to discuss the two views, but the arguments are somewhat repetitive and lack depth. While the personal example of failing a math exam is relevant, it is not fully integrated into a broader academic argument. To improve, ensure that each paragraph focuses strictly on the prompt's requirements and provides more detailed, analytical support for your claims.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks clear paragraphing, appearing as a single block of text. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas; sentences are often strung together with 'and' or run-on structures, making the logical progression difficult to follow. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the transition between the two viewpoints is abrupt. To reach a higher band, you must use clear paragraph breaks for each new idea and employ a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'conversely', 'consequently') to guide the reader through your argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'diff', 'minset', 'thet', 'thoought', 'handlle', and 'accecptinhg'. These errors are frequent enough to occasionally impede the reader's understanding. The range of vocabulary is limited to common, everyday words, and there is little attempt to use topic-specific or academic language. To improve, focus on learning the correct spelling of common words and expanding your vocabulary to include more precise terms related to career, finance, and personal development.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('some people thinks'), incorrect pronoun usage ('there own mindset'), and run-on sentences. Punctuation is almost entirely absent, which makes the text difficult to parse. There is a lack of complex sentence structures; most sentences are simple or poorly constructed compound sentences. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring each sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practice using periods to separate distinct thoughts rather than relying on conjunctions.
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