Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
People often face difficulties such as financial crisis or job dissatisfaction in their respective lives. In this regard, some people believe that accepting the situation is the best possible way while others argue that one must try their best to improve the situation. This essay will discuss both views before citing a suitable conclusion.
On the one hand, acceptating the bad situation has its own benefits like it will provide the individual suffering from some temporary relief which will help him to think positively by ignoring the factors of a negative situation. Also, accepting the circumstance allows the person to stay risk free as there are possible chances that in trying to improve or solve the problem the person could make it even worse. In addition, just accepting the situation saves time, money and balances mental health of the suffering person and encourages him to focus on future tasks and utilise his time in doing productive work which will ultimately help in the future.
On the other hand, trying to improve the situation opens doors to various opportunities. Although it involves risk but handling and finding the solution is most of the time a better decision as one could get a permanent solution for that particular circumstance. Also, trying to improve the situation by finding a suitable solution will help the person to handle these types o situations in a better way in the future. As a result a person will not only get the solution for the problem but he will also secure the future from arising same kind of problem in his life.
In my opinion, accepting the situation is only good for temporary relief or if the person just wants to be on the safe side but finding a solution can improve the situation a lot more than just sitting and thinking about the problem as it can improve future problematic situations.
To conclude, although it entirely depends on a person on how he desires to handle the situation yet I firmly believe that finding a permanent solution for the situation is always a better alternative..
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the prompt, discussing both views and providing a clear personal opinion. The ideas are relevant, such as the benefits of acceptance for mental health and the long-term advantages of proactive problem-solving. However, the development is somewhat repetitive. For instance, the argument about 'future tasks' and 'future problems' is mentioned in both body paragraphs without specific examples or deeper analysis. To reach a higher band, you should provide concrete examples—such as a specific career scenario—to illustrate your points more effectively. The position is consistent throughout the essay, which is a strength.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the two viewpoints. You use cohesive devices like 'On the one hand,' 'On the other hand,' and 'In addition' to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and there is a tendency to repeat phrases like 'trying to improve the situation' rather than using referencing or synonyms to maintain flow. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the link between sentences could be more sophisticated to improve the overall cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to express your ideas clearly. You use some topic-specific vocabulary such as 'financial crisis,' 'job dissatisfaction,' and 'permanent solution.' However, the range is somewhat limited, and there are instances of slightly unnatural phrasing, such as 'acceptating' (a spelling error) and 'secure the future from arising same kind of problem.' To improve, try to incorporate more precise collocations and a wider variety of academic vocabulary to avoid repeating the same phrases throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors that persist. For example, 'acceptating' is a non-existent word, and there are issues with article usage and prepositional phrases, such as 'in their respective lives' or 'the suffering person.' Additionally, some sentences are slightly clunky, such as 'it entirely depends on a person on how he desires to handle the situation.' Increasing the frequency of error-free complex sentences and proofreading for minor slips would help elevate your score in this criterion.
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