Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In the recent year unemployement has become a widely issue.Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money.Other peoples arguee that it is better to try and improve such situations.
This essay will discuss both views, and I believe that it is better to try to improve difficult situations when problems occur in our lives. Instead of giving up, people should face their problems and make every possible effort to overcome them.
I strongly agree with this view because i thing that problem are also very important because when we faces difficulties, challanges we become mentally and physically fit. On the other hand if a person do not facing any difficulties in his life, so i thing we do not able to face difficulty in his life.
Another important point is that many person also arguee that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money.I thing if a person accept a bad situation like he know that i do not have a good job, moreover he know that there is a case of unemployement, so i thing a person struggle and try to achieve a good job.Furthermore due to hard work and struggle he can achieve his goal.
In conclusion, i thing that in the ups and downs of life, there come moments when a person can feel completely disappointed and lose hope, so person can not lose hope and try again and again, if you first failed do not lose your hope, keeping trying is only a method that you can succeed.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both views and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive. For example, the argument regarding the benefits of facing difficulties is somewhat circular and lacks concrete examples or logical depth. The discussion of the opposing view is also underdeveloped, as the student struggles to clearly articulate why someone might choose to accept a bad situation, instead conflating it with the act of struggling. To improve, you should focus on providing distinct, well-reasoned arguments for each side of the prompt rather than repeating the same general concepts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often disjointed. While some cohesive devices are used, such as 'On the other hand' and 'Furthermore', they are sometimes applied incorrectly or in a way that does not logically connect the preceding and following sentences. For instance, the transition into the second body paragraph is weak, and the conclusion introduces new, slightly repetitive advice rather than summarizing the main points effectively. The use of referencing is also inconsistent, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of the argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits the ability to convey complex ideas. Phrases like 'bad situation' and 'i thing' (repeated multiple times) demonstrate a lack of lexical variety. There are also frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'unemployement', 'arguee', and 'challanges'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of precision and the reliance on a very narrow range of words prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. Expanding your vocabulary to include more academic collocations and synonyms would significantly improve your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'a person do not facing', 'problem are'), incorrect verb forms, and missing articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences and missing spaces after periods. While the meaning is usually understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and the lack of complex sentence structures indicate a limited control over the language. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would be beneficial.
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