Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Few populations believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unlikely job or low-income. While other people argue that it is positive to try and improve current situations. This essay will examine the tension between continue in unsatisfactory job and better to improve opportunity.
A competing perspective is that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. These kinds of thoughts are applied by lower middle class families. For example, a person can't find a jobs for six months. After six months, a company offers a job with low salary. He wants to accept this proposal with the base of six months efforts and family pressure. In my country, the elite class community did not want to rise the lower-class community. For instance, a private or government jobs did not want to become a well settle person. They give a salary according to the needs. They make their employees more dependent to the company. The major mistake is our thoughts and self-confidence. Therefore, they did not even try to improve their current situation and lifestyle.
On the other hand, some people believe that it is beneficial to try and enhance your current era. To elaborate it, a job person is also started a part-time business. Beginning of the business, he is troll by his relatives and also little family members. But he continues his own business after faces the blames. It is better to try and improve your situation instead of losing your confidence. This type of generation will be successful in life because they don't think what people say.
Ultimately, the evidence suggests that you should try something with self- confidence nor dependent on the other company or family members. you should learn your mistakes. You only lose when you give up. So, you need to work smart and invest your efforts in a skill-based company which respect your skill. you should invest time and efforts these companies which behaves as a human and treat like a company member.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. The discussion regarding the 'elite class' and 'private or government jobs' is slightly tangential and lacks a direct link to the prompt's core theme of accepting versus improving a bad situation. The arguments are generally relevant, but the explanation of the 'pro-acceptance' view is a bit repetitive and relies on generalizations. To improve, ensure that every paragraph directly supports the prompt's central question rather than drifting into social commentary.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'To elaborate it' and 'Beginning of the business' are awkward transitions. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as the use of 'they' in the second paragraph, where the antecedent is ambiguous. While there is a logical progression from the introduction to the conclusion, the flow between sentences is occasionally interrupted by these cohesive issues, which prevents the essay from reaching a higher band.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of unnatural word choices, such as 'unlikely job' instead of 'unsatisfactory job', 'current era' instead of 'current circumstances', and 'little family members' instead of 'younger family members'. The student attempts to use more complex vocabulary, but these attempts often result in collocations that sound non-native. To achieve a higher score, focus on using more accurate collocations and avoiding literal translations of phrases.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'a job person is also started'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'did not want to rise'), and missing articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with capitalization and comma usage. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors indicates a lack of control over more complex grammatical structures, which is a key requirement for higher band scores.
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