Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
it goes without saying that, in recent decades, many individuals are suffering from lack of money or unsatisfactory job. However, some people says that it is good to accept bad situation. Therefore other believes that it is better to try and improve such situations. I would like talk discuss both views and give my opinion in upcoming paragraph.
To begin, the first school of thought that a person should accept a bad situation. According to them, having a problem of lack of money or unsatisfactory job, instead of being sad or dipressed, a person should accept their fate and do more work on it next time because by being sad nothing will change only a person can change his fate by hardworking and even by failed in that situation, a person do not do the same thing again
Furthermore details, in the second school of thought, that it is better to try and improve such situation. According to them, by having a bad situation such as unsatisfactory job or shortage of money, instead of waiting for a long time period to think to do better next time, they should wait for some days and try to find a job from which they find satisfaction or from where the monthly salary is high because in future they will found it to find a situation job for them because of artificial intelligent, so, instead of waiting they improve in which they are bad and improve their weakness and situation so they won't find they same work hard
in conclusion, it can be conclude that person should accept his fate but should not wait for a long time period, they should reapply to have a good result
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the task. However, the development of ideas is limited and often repetitive. For instance, the explanation of the first view is somewhat circular, focusing on 'hardworking' without providing concrete examples or deeper analysis. The second paragraph attempts to discuss the second view but becomes confusing due to the inclusion of irrelevant concepts like 'artificial intelligent,' which obscures the main argument. The position is present but lacks the depth and clarity required for a higher band score. To improve, ensure each point is supported by clear, logical reasoning rather than vague assertions.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and a lack of cohesive devices. While transition words like 'To begin' and 'Furthermore' are used, they are often followed by sentences that do not flow naturally from the previous thought. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the subject of the sentences becomes muddled. The conclusion is very brief and does not effectively summarise the main points discussed in the body paragraphs. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each sentence builds upon the previous one would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'bad situation,' 'unsatisfactory job,' and 'shortage of money.' There are also instances of word-choice errors, such as 'dipressed' (depressed) and 'found it to find a situation job,' which make the text difficult to follow. The attempt to use more complex vocabulary is hindered by these inaccuracies. To achieve a higher score, focus on using a wider variety of synonyms and collocations, and ensure that you are using words in their correct context. Proofreading for basic spelling errors is also essential.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'some people says,' 'other believes'), tense consistency, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or fragmented, making the text difficult to parse. For example, the sentence 'Furthermore details, in the second school of thought, that it is better...' lacks a clear main verb. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction—ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb—before attempting more complex grammatical forms.
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