Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
IN TODAY'S WORLD, THE ISSUE OF BAD SITUATION IS WIDELY DISCUSSED BY VARIOUS PEOPLE SOME BELIEVE IT IS GOOD WHILE OTHERS BELIEVE ITS NOT .IN MY OPINION I COMPLETELY AGREE WITH THIS VIEW . THIS ESSAY WILL EXPLAIN THE MAIN REASON TO SUPPORT MY OPINION WITH CLEAR EXAMPLES.
ONE MAIN REASON WHY I AGREE IT IS BEST TO ACCEPT A BAD SITUATION LIKE THAT UNSATISFACTORY JOBS OR SHORTAGEE OF MONEY. FOR EXAMPLE, IF WE HAVE NO MONEY, WE TRY TO GET NEW JOB AND CREATE A SOME SMALL BUSINESS. AS A RESULT, NOWDAYS SOCIETY AND PUBLIC STARTED NEW SMALL BUSINESS LIKE SOME FEMALE IS STARTED NAILS AND CLOTHING BRANDS SOME JEWELLERY ARTICALS. FURTHERMORE, MALE STARTED IS SOME SMALL BUSINESS LIKE PROPERTY AND SHOE BRAND AND SOME MAN,S CLOTHING BRAND ETC. IN ADDITION, SOMETIME WE ARE DEPRESSED BUT ITS NOT GOOD FOR HEALTH.
THEREFORE, IF WE LOST JOB WHEN TRY TO IMPROVE ITSELF AND STARTED NEW JOUNERY.
ONE MAIN REASON WHY, I DISGREE THAT IT IS BETTER TO TRY IMPROVE SUCH SITUATIONS I BELIEVE THAT NOT GOOD THING . FOR INSTANCE, SOMETIME LIFE SITUATIONS ARE VERY INTENSE LIFE SOME UPS AND DOWN IS COMMING IN LIFE.
CONSEQUENTLY,IF WE ARE DERPRESSED SOME THINGS ITS NOT BENEFICAL FOR FAMLIY AND MENTAL HEALTHY.MOREOVER, ITS NEGATIVE IMPACT FOR THE KIDS .
IN CONCLSION, AFTER DISCUSSING BOTH SIDES, IT IS CLEAR THAT IT OIS BEST TO ACCEPT BAD SOLUATION HAS VARIOUS BENEFITS ALTHOUGHT THESE SOME PEOPLE WHO DISGREE , I STRONGLY BELIEVE THAT ADVANTAGES ARE GEATER.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address both sides of the argument, but the position is inconsistent and confusing. In the introduction, you state you agree with the view of accepting bad situations, but the body paragraphs fail to clearly distinguish between the two perspectives. The arguments provided are underdeveloped and often contradictory, making it difficult for the reader to follow your reasoning. For example, you mention that accepting a bad situation leads to starting a business, which is actually an example of trying to improve a situation. The lack of clear, logical development of ideas means the task is only partially addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'In addition' and 'Consequently', but they are often used incorrectly or do not logically connect the ideas. The progression of ideas is disjointed, particularly in the second and third paragraphs where the transition between the two viewpoints is unclear. Referencing is also problematic; for instance, the use of 'it' and 'this' often lacks a clear antecedent, which forces the reader to guess the intended meaning. Overall, the organisation lacks the logical flow required for a higher band.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'good', 'bad', and 'small business'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'jewellery articals' instead of 'articles' and 'mental healthy' instead of 'mental health'. Spelling errors are also prevalent throughout the text, such as 'shortagee', 'nowdays', 'jounery', and 'conclsion'. These errors occasionally impede communication, as the reader must work to interpret the intended meaning. To improve, you should focus on learning more precise vocabulary related to the topic and proofreading for common spelling mistakes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently marred by grammatical errors. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'some female is started' and 'male started is some small business'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and unnecessary capitalisation. The frequent errors in basic grammar, such as verb tense usage and article omission, are noticeable and cause difficulty for the reader. A wider range of error-free complex structures is needed to reach a higher band.
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