Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

People have different opinions about whether people should be satisfied with an inconvenient circumstance such an lack of funds or bad job environment or instead of people settling for the lesser opportunities they should rather improve it. While both sides have some merits, I believe people should always strive to be in good a condition. This essay will discuss both views and give my opinion.

On the one hand, the principal reason why people believe bad situation can be managed is because of high rates of unemployment and to avoid fraudulent activities. Firstly, currently many people are unemployment, so people tend to accept jobs with unfavorable conditions. If people couldn't get their desirable job, they tend to be a victim of bad jobs. For instance, a man who has been unemployed for five years, will be desperate to secure employment under poor term conditions especially poor salaries. Secondly, people tend to encourage others to manage their situations because they don't want them to acquire wealth in illegal ways. Therefore, these values has be instill in most youths, so they are forced to struggle under poor situations.

On the other hand, I agree with those who encourage people living and working in unfavorable situation should speak up or improve it because of mental health balance. This means, many people in this condition often break down psychologically and it can serious such that instead of speaking up they hid their feelings. Furthermore, another critical dimension is inability for people to upgrade their skills. In other words, majority of the public are subjected to a bad conditions because of their limited experience and expertise. Therefore, instead of people enduring difficult daily living, they should be implored to learn and broaden their skills. For instance, a fashion designer that refuses to upgrade her skills will be subjected to low pays.

Inconclusion, Although managing an unfavorable circumstance are driven by scarcity of job and a way in which society reduces fraudulent activities, I Believe people have to improve their situations in order to avoid mental breakdown and to influence people to upgrade their skills.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all parts of the prompt by discussing both perspectives and providing a clear personal opinion. Your position is consistent throughout the essay. However, the development of your ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the argument regarding 'fraudulent activities' is a bit tangential and could have been better linked to the necessity of accepting poor conditions. While your examples, such as the fashion designer, are relevant, they could be expanded to more fully illustrate the 'improvement' side of the argument. To reach a higher band, ensure that every point made is fully explained and directly supports your central thesis.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. You use cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand,' 'Furthermore,' and 'In conclusion' to guide the reader. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical or awkward, such as 'This means, many people in this condition often break down.' Additionally, there are instances where referencing is unclear, such as 'these values has be instill,' where the antecedent is not explicitly defined. Paragraphing is used appropriately, but the flow between sentences could be smoother to improve the overall readability and logical progression of your arguments.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'unfavorable conditions,' 'psychologically,' and 'expertise.' However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'bad job environment' instead of 'poor working environment,' and 'poor term conditions.' You also struggle with word forms, such as 'many people are unemployment' instead of 'unemployed.' While your vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning, it lacks the precision and flexibility required for a higher band. Focusing on collocations and accurate word forms will significantly improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of your writing. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('these values has be instill'), incorrect verb forms ('people are unemployment'), and missing articles or prepositions ('inability for people to upgrade'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your main points, they are frequent enough to lower the score. To improve, pay closer attention to basic sentence construction, verb tenses, and the correct use of articles.

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