Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Few people believe that it is better to accept you bad time like a bad job or unfinancial problems. on the other handhand some believe that it is better to improve your life style and come out from the situation.
I will discuss the both points and provide my prespective after discussing the that issue. First the people who said that it is better to accept your stituation like you are doing a bad job and also facing an bad financial problems. It is not a bad advice for those people who have not a good experience and also newer in their field. Everyone face a bad time time once a time . You can not do anything if u do not have a other option, so best is this to accept your bad situation and push your self upward if you don no have another chance.
The others who believe that it is better to move your self upward is also a good idea and you can change your financial situation and life style by taking a risk. Everybody have to take this chance to come out from the trouble and makes his life better. To improve your current situation and get your self out of trouble is a best opinion. people use it for example Jeff bezos and Elon musk changed their life styles afdyer applying this.
In the whole point, I am on the that side of people who choose to improve your situation and change their life plans.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The essay addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views on accepting versus improving difficult situations and provides the writer's own opinion in the final paragraph. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat repetitive. For example, the arguments regarding accepting a bad job or financial shortage rely heavily on basic assertions without deep extension. While the position is clear at the end, the overall development corresponds best to the Band 5 descriptor where ideas remain somewhat under-developed and limited.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay is divided into four paragraphs, attempting an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a brief conclusion. However, overall progression is hindered by poor transitions, non-standard phrasing such as 'In the whole point', and mechanical cohesive devices. Referencing is occasionally unclear, as seen in the ambiguous pronoun use when referring back to previous ideas. Paragraphing is present, but the logical flow between sentences within paragraphs is frequently disrupted, aligning this response with the Band 4 descriptor.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, featuring frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'you bad time' instead of 'your bad times' and 'unfinancial problems' instead of 'financial problems'. While the writer attempts less common names like 'Jeff bezos and Elon musk', the lexical range remains limited and sometimes strains the reader's understanding. These characteristics fit the Band 4 descriptor closely.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The writing exhibits a very limited range of structures with frequent grammatical errors that often distort meaning. There are persistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('Everyone face', 'Everybody have'), missing auxiliary verbs ('who have not a good experience'), and faulty article use ('an bad financial problems'). Simple sentences predominate, and attempts at complex structures are frequently inaccurate, which corresponds to the Band 4 descriptor.
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