Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

many individuals believes that to bear an unacceptable condition,for instance a job if an empoly never lies or someone is facing financial loss. however other believes that man must struggles to make his life better in every condition. facing hardship to make the lifestyle better is the part of success. it motivates an individuals to have a well adopted lifestyles. this essay will discuss both points.

overall in many circumstances a individual must have ability to survive weather the condition is acceptable or not. its not always nessarary to get the dream job but the thing we consider is to change yourself according to the situation however workhard to improve the circumstances is other choice.

on the one hand individuals must train theirselves to go through the unacceptable condition. for intance a empoly workhard for the promotion but unfortunately manager upgrade tthe post of another empoly it doesnot mean that that individuals doesnt deserver it it means his luck doesnt worked this time. most of the time human face many financial issues. many have to pay the rent, bills and morges for all that he must need bundle of money which currently he dont have what he gonna do? givingup?

is it even a choice. no he must go for another job or may ask for loan.it make the situation bearable for a moment.encouraging yourself to face the hardship makes the life bit easier and acceptable.

on the other hand many individuals believes that individuals must workhard and save money for un acceptable situation for thsi the life must be planed so thats he should not face anykind of unacceptable situation through out his life. for instance a labour is working under the low wages he must go for another job to save extra money. a student who workhaerd through out the year he most of the time gets goof marks as compared to those who never takkes the studies seriously students like them often endup failing the subjects.

in my prespective i believe that firsly we must workhard to achieve our goal if the luck doesnt support us it doesnt means we give up.life is not bed of roses one must lean to pass the bad situation in a courageous way.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student addresses both views regarding accepting bad situations versus trying to improve them, and presents a personal opinion in the introduction and conclusion. However, the development of ideas is limited and at times confusing due to expression issues. For instance, the discussion on the employee whose manager upgrades someone else's post attempts to support the idea of accepting circumstances, but the reasoning is somewhat muddled. The position is discernible overall, but the arguments lack the extension and clear supporting examples required to reach higher band levels. It satisfies the task requirements, but ideas remain somewhat under-developed, aligning best with Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, including an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, showing an attempt at overall organisation. However, the progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by a lack of clear cohesive devices and logical links between sentences. Phrases like 'on the one hand' and 'on the other hand' are present, but referencing and punctuation are often faulty, such as in 'for thsi the life must be planed so thats he should not face'. Paragraphing is also somewhat erratic, with the conclusion merged with the final body section. This structural disjointedness corresponds to a Band 5.0 score.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors (e.g., 'empoly', 'nessarary', 'workhard', 'morges', 'firsly') and incorrect word forms (e.g., 'un acceptable', 'takkes', 'lean' instead of 'learn'). While the student attempts some less common phrasing, such as 'bed of roses' in the conclusion, the range is limited and noticeable errors in word choice and spelling cause frequent difficulty and strain for the reader throughout the text. This performance reflects the descriptors for Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak, with a very limited range of structures successfully and accurately used. Most sentences contain significant errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'many individuals believes', 'human face'), tense consistency, and punctuation. Run-on sentences and sentence fragments are prevalent, such as 'is it even a choice. no he must go for another job'. Complex sentences are attempted, but they are almost always faulty. The high frequency of grammatical errors frequently impedes communication, placing this response firmly in Band 4.0.

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