Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Few individuals think that is good to agree about bad situation, such as an unacceptable cicumstances of lack of cash.Others dispute about that it is good to try and enhance such scenario.Different populece has different thinking regarding this matter. Some people agree that if any thing bad happens that they connect with thw god means that is done by god. Some think to take good step for change the situation.According to my opinion we take good initiatives to improve over situation.
On the one hand, certain humans think that if any bad situation come to us we just accept it as or good will. So basically in their mind what sort of thing is happens. They just link this thing by will of theie god. In many religious beliefs this condition is widely accept that any bad thing or good thing occurs is all due to God. So that's why people believe that its ok to us.If we are not satisfied from job its all due to god so that's why people easily accepted all their bad conditions.
On the other hand, mostly people has dipute about this matter. Most of the people think that its not due to will of God but due to our own hard woek and commitment. People consider that we have to work hard and show good will about their work and job. If they obey the rule and regulations our job duration means nobody struck off us that leads to shortage of money.
To sum up, every individuals have their own opinions depend upon situations that some believe that all of that happens due to will of god and accepts that situation while some believe that that all thing happens due to us and we try to improve our lives. I also agree with that we try to improve our life style by work hard and commitment.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both views required by the prompt—accepting a bad situation versus trying to improve it—and provides the student's own opinion in the introduction and conclusion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the discussion on why people accept bad situations relies heavily on the concept of religious belief and 'the will of God,' but this point is reiterated across multiple sentences without being extended or contrasted effectively. Similarly, the counterargument is briefly touched upon through hard work and job regulations, but lacks specific examples or depth. The position is clear throughout, but the reasoning remains basic, aligning most closely with Band 5 descriptors where ideas are present but under-developed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into four paragraphs, showing an attempt at a logical structure with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, progression is frequently hindered by awkward transitions and repetitive sentence structures. Cohesive devices are basic and sometimes inaccurate, such as 'So basically in their mind what sort of thing is happens' and 'So that's why people believe that its ok to us.' Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult to follow the logical flow between sentences. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion is weak and mechanical. These features reflect Band 5 criteria, where organization is visible but lacks clear overall progression and smooth links.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and restricted in range. The student frequently misuses words or uses incorrect collocations, such as 'agree about bad situation' instead of 'accept a bad situation', 'unacceptable cicumstances of lack of cash', and 'Different populece has different thinking'. There are also frequent spelling and word-form errors, including 'cicumstances', 'populece', 'thw', 'woek', and 'individuals' used with singular verbs. While the meaning can generally be deduced by the reader, the noticeable errors and limited vocabulary repertoire place this response firmly in the Band 5 category.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentences, but grammatical accuracy is very low throughout the text. There are frequent errors in basic sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions. Examples include 'According to my opinion we take good initiatives to improve over situation', 'certain humans think that if any bad situation come to us', and 'every individuals have their own opinions depend upon situations'. Complex structures attempted are frequently faulty. Because errors are very frequent and can cause some difficulty for the reader, this performance matches the Band 4 descriptor for grammatical accuracy.
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