Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In modren era, it has became a very significant debate that many people think that they should accept bad cercumstances regarding their jobs and poverty.Even, some individuals believe that should work and come out from poverty and should joy a better life style.
Firstly, Many people accept their bad situations related the jobs and money becuase they think that they can not change their life bacause they tried to be successful in life but they failed so, they started relying on their luck. They thinks that whole things ruining in their lives according to nature and like these people started thinking they are helpless and this is total wastage of time.They started doing 9pm to 5pm jobs with a fixed limited salary due this thay can not enjoy their lives properly.
At the other hands, Some people argue that they should works hard for changing their circumstances.Even, they failed in anything so, They should not accept failures they should try again and again till they success moreover, they believe that people are responsile about the lifestyle people can enjoy the lives as they want to spend.Furthermore, as like these people believe to develop their own business rather then doing job in ferms. They think that doing jobs in firms could stop you to be successful in life.
In conclusion, I personaly agree with the second statment.I particularly believe that people should works hard to change their livingstyle. Even, they face failure, they should try again for grabing success in life.They should come out from the poverty and enjoy a relyable life.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both views regarding the acceptance of bad situations versus trying to improve them, and clearly states the writer's personal opinion in the conclusion agreeing with the second view. The ideas are presented, such as people accepting their fate due to past failures or striving hard to change their circumstances. However, the development of these ideas is limited and somewhat repetitive, lacking concrete examples or deeper elaboration. For instance, the discussion on why people accept poverty or jobs is generalized without supporting evidence. Furthermore, some minor details detract from the overall clarity. Because all parts of the prompt are addressed with a clear position, but the ideas are not fully extended or supported, this performance aligns well with the Band 5 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into distinct paragraphs, including an introduction, two body paragraphs representing different views, and a conclusion. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by mechanical and inadequate cohesive devices. Transitions such as 'Firstly', 'At the other hands', and 'Furthermore' are used awkwardly or inaccurately (e.g., 'At the other hands'). Referencing is also occasionally unclear, as seen with ambiguous pronoun usage ('like these people started thinking', 'as like these people believe'). While there is a visible attempt to structure the essay logically, the overall organization suffers from repetitive phrasing and weak cohesive links, placing it firmly at Band 5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive throughout the response, with noticeable errors in spelling and word choice that occasionally impede the reader's understanding. Examples include spelling errors such as 'modren', 'cercumstances', 'bacause', 'thay', 'responsile', 'statment', 'livingstyle', and 'relyable'. The student attempts some less common phrases like '9pm to 5pm jobs' and 'develop their own business', but the range is limited and minimally adequate. Word choice is frequently awkward, such as 'joy a better life style' instead of 'enjoy', and 'in ferms' instead of 'in firms'. These persistent lexical inaccuracies restrict the score to Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 based on the positive interpretation of minimally adequate communicative range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar and punctuation is weak. There are frequent errors in tense usage, subject-verb agreement, and clause structures. Examples include 'it has became', 'many people think that they should accept... Even, some individuals believe that should work', 'whole things ruining in their lives', and 'people are responsile about the lifestyle people can enjoy'. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing spaces after commas and periods, as well as run-on or fragmented sentences. Because complex sentences are frequently faulty and errors occur with high frequency, causing some difficulty for the reader, this warrants a Band 4.5, rounded up to 5.0.
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