Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
It is argued that few masses think that it is good to accept a worst situation, for instance displeasing job or scarcity of money, while other assert that it is finer to try and enhance such situation. This essay will discuss the both view as far as, I am concerned in favour of latter notion .
To commence with, it is the finer way tp improve such situation . To explain it, because i think every employers face many challenges through their job, this situation increase discrimination while discourage ethical behaviour. For instance a headline of BBC (British Broadcasting corporation)revealed that Nepal is one of country which faces many challenges through their jobs and shortage of money,this leads to economic decrease and cannot live a lavish life .Thus, it is proved it is not best to accept the bad situation .
Shifting towards final view , it is best to try and improve many situation because it raises social awareness and encourage time work and the final view is to promote equality. For example they face their worst situation and do the comfortable job which have a huge salary so they can live a better life because in moderate era they have a satisfactory job and have a sufficiant salary .
In conclusion, although i beleive that individual should try to improve their situation and work hard of their better job, so they can a good life . so they have a better life and fullfill their needs . They always work hard ,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to discuss both views regarding accepting or trying to improve bad situations, and presents a personal opinion in the introduction. However, the development of ideas is severely limited and often lacks clarity. For instance, the argument in the second body paragraph mentions that 'employers face many challenges through their job, this situation increase discrimination while discourage ethical behaviour,' which is difficult to follow and lacks logical connection to the prompt. The examples provided, such as the reference to BBC reporting on Nepal, are disjointed and do not effectively support the main points. While all parts of the prompt are touched upon, the lack of coherent thought extension and frequent lack of clarity place this response at Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay uses basic paragraphing, but the overall progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by confusing sentences and abrupt transitions. While some cohesive devices are attempted, such as 'To commence with' and 'In conclusion', referencing is often unclear, leaving the reader struggling to follow the argument's trajectory. For instance, the phrase 'Shifting towards final view' introduces the second body paragraph in a mechanical and unnatural way. Additionally, pronoun reference is frequently ambiguous, as seen in the sentence 'For example they face their worst situation and do the comfortable job...', where the antecedent for 'they' is unclear. These organizational and cohesive shortcomings reflect Band 4.5 to 5.0 characteristics; therefore, a band score of 5.0 is appropriate.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, frequently showing noticeable errors in word choice and collocation that cause difficulty for the reader. Examples include 'few masses think', 'worst situation', 'scarcity of money', and 'moderate era' (likely intended to mean modern era). Words are often misused, such as 'comfortable job which have a huge salary' or 'sufficiant salary'. There are also minor spelling and typographical issues like 'beleive'. The lexical range is limited and minimally adequate for conveying simple meaning, aligning well with the Band 5 descriptor where errors cause some difficulty and vocabulary remains basic.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex ones. Frequent grammatical errors impede readability and distort meaning. Examples include subject-verb agreement errors ('every employers face'), incorrect preposition usage ('in favour of latter notion'), and fragmented or run-on sentences, such as 'This essay will discuss the both view as far as, I am concerned in favour of latter notion.' Punctuation is also problematic, with spaces misplaced before commas and periods throughout the text. Because errors are frequent and often cause difficulty for the reader, this performance earns a Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0.
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