Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
some individuals believed that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as unsatisfactory, job or shortage of money while other argue that it is better to try and improve such situations
on one hand, some individuals think that it is best to accept a bad situation such as unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. They think this because they have tried many time in this, but they failed in it. They think this is best for our satisfaction if they think this, then they never demotivated in their life. Then they always try to be a successful man in their life if they are demotivated, then they never be a successful in their life. From my perspective. They worked hard and become more success in their life and improve their lifestyles also.
on other hand, some people improve their mistakes like an unsatisfactory, job or shortage of money. They always motivated from their obstacles in their life. If they improve, then these individuals are more successful in their life. They also fulfil all their dreams. these peoples are never get in depression because they always in the form of motivated. if they are demotivated from other peoples, then they also don't be successful in their life and fed up from their own life.
overall, my opinion is that what to be improved such situations while we never demotivated from these situations because this is life if we don't have any obstacles in life, then there is no fun and interest in our life. Obstacle is in the every person's life.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both views regarding whether to accept or improve a bad situation and provides a personal opinion in the conclusion, fulfilling the basic requirements of the task. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat repetitive. For instance, the student repeatedly relies on the notions of being demotivated or successful without deeply exploring the underlying causes or consequences of either accepting or fighting an unsatisfactory situation. The position is stated, but the support lacks depth and extension, aligning best with Band 5 descriptors where ideas are present but under-developed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, including an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which shows an attempt at overall organisation. However, the progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by poor cohesive devices and repetitive sentence structures. Phrases like 'on one hand' and 'on other hand' are used to signal shifts, but referencing is often unclear, such as 'if they think this, then they never demotivated in their life.' Cohesive devices are used mechanically and sometimes inaccurately, leading to a choppy flow that restricts the score to Band 5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive, frequently reusing terms such as 'situation', 'job', 'success', 'successful', 'motivated', and 'demotivated'. There are noticeable errors in word choice and phrasing, such as 'some individuals believed' (instead of believe) and 'some people improve their mistakes like an unsatisfactory, job'. The range is minimally adequate for the task, but frequent inaccuracies and lack of flexibility place this response firmly at Band 4.5, rounded to Band 5 based on positive marking for communicating basic concepts.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors, including missing capitalisation at the start of sentences, punctuation errors (such as commas separating subjects from verbs like 'From my perspective. They worked hard...'), and issues with subject-verb agreement and tense consistency (e.g., 'some individuals believed that it is...'). While the meaning can generally be followed, the high frequency of errors across sentences causes difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 4 to Band 5 range, warranting a 4.5 rounded to 5.0.
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