Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Some people belive that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatifactory job or shortage of money. others argue tht it is better to try and improve such situations .

acoording to me , according to my experience and of my knowledge,the people who thought that the accepting of bad situation like unsatifactory job and shortage of moeny . which people are ready to accept these things according to me they are cowards who are running from the result. And avoiding to suffer their struggle. and i think these are those people who dont want to chnge their luck and their life . they thought that if our forefathers didnot change the life so why we are . they leave the life of struggle for their upcomming generation . nothing ese. And those who think that it is better to try and improve such situatiomm these are who , who really wanted to change their life for their upcomming generation. and they know if we didnt try like our forefather our generations are going to struggle. they can also thik like coward people that if they didnot do so why we are doing struggle to change our dignity but they could not do so . they didnot think like these cowards and still trying to change the situation and wated to see their generation in good and healthy situation.

according to the people who try for their best they are going to change their dignity .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to discuss both views regarding whether to accept a bad situation or try to improve it, and provides a clear personal opinion that individuals should always strive to improve their circumstances. However, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive. The arguments rely heavily on emotional and judgmental language rather than well-supported reasoning or specific examples. Terms such as 'cowards who are running from the result' are used repeatedly to characterise those who accept their situation, which results in an under-developed discussion that lacks academic balance. Furthermore, the position is not consistently maintained through sophisticated reasoning. Therefore, the response aligns best with Band 5 descriptors, as it addresses the task partially with limited idea development.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks proper paragraphing, as the vast majority of the text is crammed into one very long, dense body block following a brief introduction and an abrupt concluding sentence. This severely impacts the structural flow. Furthermore, cohesive devices are either absent, inadequate, or repetitive, with phrases like 'according to me' and 'and' heavily overused to link clauses awkwardly. There is no clear progression of ideas within the text, and referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the logical flow. These features place the response firmly in Band 4.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic, highly repetitive, and restricted in range. Words such as 'situation', 'struggle', 'generation', and 'coward' are repeated multiple times throughout the text. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the essay, including 'belive' for believe, 'unsatifactory' for unsatisfactory, 'tht' for that, 'acoording' for according, 'chnged' for change, 'upcomming' for upcoming, 'ese' for else, 'situatiomm' for situation, 'thik' for think, 'didnot' for didn't, and 'wated' for wanted. These frequent spelling and word-choice errors impede communication and constrain the vocabulary to a level that satisfies the criteria for Band 4.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of poorly constructed simple and attempted complex sentences that are frequently fragmented. There is a total absence of correct punctuation conventions, with sentences often beginning with lowercase letters, missing periods, or being incorrectly linked by commas or coordinating conjunctions ('And avoiding to suffer their struggle.'). Grammatical errors are dense and continuous, including tense inconsistencies, missing auxiliary verbs ('if we didnt try'), and faulty clause structures. These severe and frequent errors cause considerable strain and difficulty for the reader, placing the grammar score at Band 4.

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