Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In recent years , the question of rapid change of opportunity of job has sparked signifcant debate. While some individuals argue that it is best to accept a bad siuation . However on the other hand people believe that it is better to try and improve situation . In my point of view that try for success beneficial as compare to give up
On the one hand several individuals assume that it is better to accept current condition rather than working on improve their qulity of life . Also the gave up from starting point ,they want to spend coming year as they are now. We can see serval example in country's area in which villagers does not do any work
Also we have individual on the other hand they cosider that we must try and never give up . Dut to this we will able to change later life . They also believe that running from issue is not sollution of anythings. Instead of getting away from issues they must face that . Like success full people ELONE MUSK did at their suffering time ,Now he is most welthy persone on earth .
In concution, in my point of view people should not give up untile his last breaths . many people assume that give up is one of best and easy way to do anything . However , several people believe that give up or running from issue is not part of life,So instead of running they should face a issue then figerout sollution for that
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address both views regarding whether to accept a bad situation or try to improve it, and presents a personal opinion that trying to succeed is better. However, the ideas are severely limited and under-developed. For example, the argument that villagers do not do any work is an over-generalisation and lacks logical connection to the prompt. Furthermore, the example of Elon Musk is introduced abruptly with spelling errors ('ELONE MUSK') and lacks proper elaboration to support the viewpoint effectively. Although all parts of the prompt are touched upon, the lack of depth and superficial reasoning place this response at Band 5.0 according to the descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the overall organisation and progression are faulty. There are noticeable issues with cohesive devices and referencing. For instance, the transition 'However on the other hand people believe' is grammatically awkward and redundant. Additionally, sentences like 'Also the gave up from starting point' are extremely unclear in their referencing. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal flow of ideas within paragraphs is disrupted by abrupt shifts and a lack of clear logical connectors, resulting in a cohesive structure that fits the Band 4 to 5 range, warranting a Band 4.5.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling and word-choice errors that strain the reader. Examples of lexical errors include 'signifcant' for significant, 'siuation' for situation, 'qulity' for quality, 'cosider' for consider, 'sollution' for solution, 'welthy persone' for wealthy person, 'concution' for conclusion, 'untile' for until, and 'figerout' for figure out. The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for conveying very simple ideas, but the high frequency of inaccurate word forms and misspellings points clearly to a Band 4.0 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent attempts at complex structures that are faulty. There are persistent, heavy grammatical errors throughout the text, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('villagers does not do'), incorrect prepositions, tense inconsistencies ('did at their suffering time'), and structural fragments ('In my point of view that try for success beneficial as compare to give up'). These frequent errors frequently cause difficulty for the reader and distort meaning, aligning with the Band 4.0 descriptors.
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