Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some people think that it is best to accept a unpleasant cicumstances, such as an discomforting job or financial issue of money. others believe that it is best to overcome and improve such scenario. I agree that it is better to search for another option of job to deal with such kind of situations.

Firstly few people in today's generation especially young youth due to fear or anxiety issues with parents about not doing anything face this concern as they might assume doing such job for satisfaction of their parents needs and they accept such type of unsatisfied job for example there are many jobs which people lack interest to do but still accept the situation and move along with dissatisfied job due to fear of not achieving other job or being accepted as fresher if joined another department furthermore anxiety of low salaried person.

Secondly, parents should support their children and provide proper guidance to overcome such situations. people should try to believe in theselves and should try to overcome worst scenario of their anything it might be For example an unsatisfied job people must try get a satisfactory levelled job because it also affects people livelihood. A proper job can make you feel calm, relaxed as well as a financial support for themselves . Another example is if there is a satisfied job you are a good salaried person an individual can overcome all soughts of problem in their life and need not to worry about financial crisis and also this indirectly affects health of an individual. people can sleep peacefully and maintain a healthy lifestyle with family, friends and colleagues.

So in a conclusion in my opinion an individual must apply for a better job which gives feeling of satisfaction and also overcome financial problem if a person has a proper level of job he indirectly will not face any kind of shortage of problem.it

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both views outlined in the prompt (accepting a bad situation versus trying to improve it) and presents a clear personal opinion in favour of searching for a better job. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive, especially in the body paragraphs where points about job dissatisfaction, parental pressure, and financial stability are stated rather than fully extended. The explanation tends to circle back to the same concepts rather than building a strong, progressive argument. While all parts of the prompt are touched upon, the reasoning lacks depth in places, placing the performance comfortably within the Band 6 descriptor where relevant ideas are presented but remain somewhat under-developed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay has a basic structure with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, paragraphing is not used effectively; for example, the second body paragraph is overly long and crams multiple distinct ideas together, while the conclusion is incomplete and abruptly cut off ('it'). Cohesive devices are used mechanically ('Firstly', 'Secondly', 'Another example is'), and referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the ambiguous pronoun use in sentences like 'worst scenario of their anything it might be'. The overall progression lacks fluidity because sentences are strung together with weak conjunctions and punctuation errors, leading to a choppy reading experience that aligns with Band 5.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student attempts to use some less common vocabulary, such as 'financial crisis', 'livelihood', and 'satisfaction', but there are frequent word choice errors and awkward collocations throughout the text. Examples include 'unpleasant cicumstances', 'discomforting job', 'financial issue of money', and 'satisfied job' when meaning 'satisfying job'. Spelling errors are also noticeable, including 'cicumstances' and 'theselves'. While the vocabulary used is adequate to convey the basic message and communicate the writer's stance, these frequent inaccuracies and restricted control over word formation limit the lexical score to Band 5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar and punctuation is weak. There are numerous run-on sentences lacking proper punctuation, such as 'Some people think that it is best to accept a unpleasant cicumstances... others believe that it is best to overcome and improve such scenario.' Furthermore, grammatical errors are frequent throughout the text, including missing articles ('search for another option of job'), incorrect prepositions, and subject-verb agreement issues. These errors often force the reader to pause and deduce the meaning, characteristic of the Band 5 descriptor where frequent errors can cause difficulty.

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