Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In contemporary socities, few people argue that the acceptance of unconfortable environment at the workplace and low bank balance is only way to live without stress . In contrast, other people thinks with hardwork and determination it is easy to tackle those obstacles in life. In my opinion discipline and consistecny will leads the bright future in all aspects.
Firstly, the main reason behind it is the mentaly pressure of work and other aspects of life like poor diet, lack of sleep and less workout. The compitition is rising in every department and corporation so to manage the workload is not easy task for people nowdays. Although, low salary package not fulfilled thier daily basic needs and expences.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is severely under-length, containing only 118 words compared to the required 250-word minimum. Because of this significant shortfall, the task cannot be fully addressed, and ideas remain extremely limited and under-developed. Although the introduction attempts to outline both views and states a personal opinion, the body paragraph breaks off abruptly after introducing only a few brief points about workplace pressure and low salary, failing to discuss both views in depth or provide sufficient supporting examples. Consequently, the response falls firmly into Band 4 for Task Achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text exhibits basic organizational attempts, utilizing introductory transition words such as 'Firstly' and 'In contrast'. However, the overall structure is undermined by the premature truncation of the essay. Paragraphing is attempted, but the second body paragraph is incomplete and abrupt. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes repetitive. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the ambiguous pronoun reference in 'the main reason behind it'. The logical progression is disrupted by the lack of development and missing conclusion. Overall, the organizational flaws and lack of a complete cohesive structure place this response at Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, reflecting a limited range that is minimally adequate for the task. There are multiple spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'socities', 'unconfortable', 'consistecny', 'compitition', and 'thier'. Phrases like 'low bank balance' and 'salary package not fulfilled' display awkward collocation and lack the precision needed for a higher band. While the meaning is generally decipherable despite the lexical errors, the vocabulary is restricted and contains noticeable flaws that cause difficulty, aligning with the Band 5 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The writing demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. While there is an attempt at a complex sentence in the introduction ('In contemporary socities, few people argue that...'), it contains structural and agreement errors, such as 'socities' and 'is only way'. There are frequent errors in basic grammar, tense, and subject-verb agreement throughout the text, including 'other people thinks', 'consistecny will leads', and 'salary package not fulfilled'. Punctuation is also flawed with erratic spacing around commas. These frequent errors and the lack of error-free complex sentences place the grammar score at Band 4.5, rounded to 4.5.
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