Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Now a days some people beleive that it is better to accept a bad time, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortageof money while, other people thin that it is better to improve such situations and get a better opportunity I beleive that it is better to improve such situation and bring up a better opportunity by means of hardwork and pass bad time with full courage instead of being sad because if you keep working instead of forgiving something by saying that ' it is the fate' then it will gives you the fruit. One important opinion is that if someone is in bad conditions and giveup everything in his bad time than he had nothing to leaarn from it and that person cannot improves his past mistake. For example if a doctors suffers through bad time and his business is not working well he had to improve himself and practice more and be an expert in his field then definetly his busines will run again and he will be succeded in his efforts. Another group of people argue that it is good to accept a bad situation because if you accept it than it will create a sort of experience in your mind and you will be awre of that thing in your future. For example a engineer suffers through shorage of job and he accept that he cannot have the ability to secure a job than thing thing will urge him to become better in his expertise. In conclusion, People who did'nt stop at a point and become consistent in their efforts whether they are facing failures and success they become rational in their doings so it is better to improve yourself instead of accepting a bad situation

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views—accepting a bad situation versus trying to improve it—and clearly states an author's opinion in the introduction and conclusion. Ideas are relevant, such as the examples of a doctor and an engineer facing difficulties. However, some arguments lack full development and clarity, particularly the second body paragraph which seems to confuse acceptance with learning from experience, leading to a slight blurring of the two opposing perspectives. The conclusion reinforces the position taken, but overall, the task response sits comfortably at Band 6 due to the under-developed and occasionally muddled explanation of the second viewpoint.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with clear paragraphing, separating the introduction, two body paragraphs, and the conclusion. However, cohesion is frequently faulty and mechanical. Run-on sentences and a lack of proper punctuation impede smooth logical progression. For example, sentences such as 'Now a days some people beleive that it is better to accept a bad time, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortageof money while, other people thin that it is better to improve such situations...' string multiple clauses together without adequate separation or cohesive ties. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and cohesive devices are overused or misused, resulting in a Band 5 level of cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting words like 'unsatisfactory', 'opportunity', 'rational', and 'consistent'. However, there are numerous spelling and word choice errors throughout the text, including 'beleive', 'thin', 'shortageof', 'hardwork', 'giveup', 'leaarn', 'improves', 'busines', 'succeded', 'awre', 'shorage', 'thing thing', and 'did'nt'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, their frequency prevents the lexical score from rising above Band 5. The student demonstrates a minimally adequate range with noticeable lexical slips.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some capability to link ideas with conjunctions and conditional structures, such as 'if you keep working instead of forgiving something by saying... then it will gives you the fruit'. However, grammatical accuracy is weak. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement ('it will gives'), tense consistency ('he suffers', 'he had to improve'), missing articles, and heavy punctuation neglect (run-on sentences spanning entire paragraphs). Because errors are frequent and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, the grammar performance aligns with Band 5 descriptors.

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