Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In recent year the acceptence of situtation has led to widespread discussed topic in modren society. Some people believe you should accepct the fate and what possition you have in society regarding jobs, wealth and status other argue you need to keep doing and try to improve yourself. Although accepting a bad situation is good for some people, keep trying for better results and improvement outweight the acceptance. In my opinion keep trying for the best is the best thing to do instead of just accepting that your fate.
Primary reason why people belive to accept the bad situation is lazyness and tired of trying to achieving there goal, which is why they create a mental concept that if you are not getting your desired career opportunity you just go for what you getting to support yourself and family. for example a candidate trying to get into a multinational company although he is not scuring the job, after numerous attempt. He will just loss hope becuse of social pressure which led him to get mini job. This the reasone people accept a bad situation.--
On other hand thoes who try to build them more effective in any situtation they keep trying and give their best to achieve what they dream. There is no limit for them if they are not getting what they want they just keep trinyg until they grap what the most valuable for them for instance Elone Musk founder of X he try again and again after failing multiple times in his rocket experiment and a day come he just got the desire result, So by keep trying and following your agenda you will defenatly sucessed.
In conclusion both percepectivs are acceptable at there extance but In my opinion keep tryng and enhancing you skill will led to your dream goals
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views—accepting a bad situation versus trying to improve it—and states a clear personal opinion in the introduction and conclusion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the first body paragraph argues that people accept bad situations due to laziness and giving up, citing an example of a candidate failing to secure a multinational job and taking a mini job. This point is slightly under-developed and tends to over-generalise. The second body paragraph attempts to support improvement using Elon Musk as an example. Overall, the position is clear, but the supporting ideas would benefit from deeper elaboration to reach a higher band level.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay presents a coherent overall arrangement with a recognizable introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, satisfying basic organizational needs. However, cohesion is frequently faulty and mechanical. There is a lack of smooth transitional phrases, and referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in phrases like 'This the reasone people accept a bad situation.--' Furthermore, paragraphing is disrupted by unconventional punctuation and formatting choices, including double hyphens and fragmented sentences. While the logical progression can be followed, the misuse of cohesive devices and mechanical errors limit the flow of the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to convey basic ideas regarding career choices, ambition, and persistence. However, there are numerous word choice and spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'acceptence', 'situtation', 'modren', 'accepct', 'posssition', 'outweight', 'belive', 'lazyness', 'scuring', 'loss', 'becuse', 'reasone', 'thoes', 'trinyg', 'grap', 'Elone', 'percepectivs', 'extance', 'tryng', and 'led'. The writer attempts less common vocabulary like 'multinational company' and 'social pressure', but frequent inaccuracies in spelling and lexical form prevent communication from being fully smooth.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The essay displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and awkward complex constructions that are frequently faulty. There are persistent errors in subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and punctuation. Examples include 'In recent year the acceptence of situtation has led to widespread discussed topic', 'what possition you have in society regarding jobs, wealth and status other argue', and 'So by keep trying and following your agenda you will defenatly sucessed.' These frequent errors cause noticeable difficulty for the reader and mean that error-free sentences are the exception rather than the majority.
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