Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
It is an ongoing debate amongst certain individuals that it is fruthfull to accept unsatisfactory circumstances like forced employments and shortage of finances.While other argue that we should contineous struggle and try to enhance the situations.I personally consider that we should not lose hope because hardwork always pays off.
The main and most prominent reason why people want to admit the interestless jobs is only because they do not have any other choice .In order to meet the expenditures of life and to support family it is intrinsic to be involve with any kind of organization. Therfor several personalities choose to do such jobs that are not fascinationg but offer them finances in return. Furthermore people do not want to become rich becuse it requires lot of struggle and risk which generally no wants to do. Everyone want to have a shortcut method to gain success in life.for instance my cousin wants to open a fast food to became earn money shop but when it came to know about his monatory sources and risk he rrefuse his plan
Moreover some people belive that struggle should not be overcome and we should restrict to our goals. It is because having no specific target can make anyone unmotivated and dull through out his life which result in mental stress in later part of life.However some wants to acquire something special in life as they have many goals which can only be accomplish by consistency and discipline. Sticking to one specific goal can generate higher success rate that's why it is thought that we should try again and again. for instance my elder brother achieve the rank of sub inspector in police force after failng twice in test but he never lose hope and continuous his efforts
in conclusion having no another way and to meet the needs of life can lead a person to accept bad circumstances but huge amount of motivation and a proper aim may prove to benficial as after achieving one's objective it can ease his life however it is obligatory for us to stay with our intentions
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses all parts of the prompt by discussing both views on accepting bad situations versus trying to improve them, and presents a clear personal opinion. The ideas are generally relevant, but the development is somewhat limited and occasionally shifts focus. For instance, the discussion on why people accept jobs touches on financial necessity, but the supporting example regarding your cousin's fast food venture is slightly unclear and under-developed. Similarly, the paragraph discussing the motivation behind goals contains some confusing phrasing, such as 'struggle should not be overcome'. Nonetheless, a clear position is maintained throughout the essay. The task is addressed with sufficient breadth, earning a Band 6.0 according to the official descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with a clear attempt at paragraphing, separating the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. However, cohesion is frequently faulty and mechanical. There are numerous missing spaces after punctuation marks and capitalization errors (e.g., 'finances.While', 'choice .In', 'life.for instance'). Furthermore, cohesive devices are sometimes inadequate or repetitive, making the flow disjointed in places. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the sudden shifts between general statements and personal examples without adequate transitional signposting. While the progression of ideas is generally understandable, the mechanical flaws pull the cohesion down to a Band 5.5 level.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary range for the task and attempts less common lexical items such as 'unsatisfactory circumstances', 'expenditures', and 'consistency and discipline'. However, there are frequent spelling errors ('fruthfull', 'contineous', 'interestless', 'Therfor', 'fascinationg', 'becuse', 'monatory', 'rrefuse', 'belive', 'failng', 'benficial') and word choice inaccuracies (e.g., 'admit the interestless jobs', 'intrinsic to be involve'). These errors occasionally impede communication and reveal a limited control of word formation and collocation, placing this response firmly in the Band 5.0 range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some variety in structure. However, grammatical accuracy is weak, with frequent errors in articles, prepositions, subject-verb agreement, and tense consistency (e.g., 'it is fruthfull to accept', 'we should contineous struggle', 'no wants to do', 'Everyone want', 'which result in', 'when it came to know'). Punctuation is also problematic, with missing spaces and run-on structures. These frequent errors cause occasional difficulty for the reader and prevent the response from achieving a higher band, making Band 5.0 an accurate assessment.
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