Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Life holds countless experiences regardless of what an individual desires. Majority of people believe that the best to keep going in the pace of life is to accept a certain situation as it is particularly an unsatisfied workplace or poor cash, they lack the perception or intuition to pass through it with a great intellectual power. Among these conditions, people likely convince themselves to accept it as its written in their fate and do not pursue their wants in life either its about a better lifestyle or a successful career, they typically engage into accepting the hard time, ignoring the possibilities to improve them. For instance, person who declares not having enough salary from job will perceive it as a burden, blame his fate or lose hope without pushing himself to seek a new job, because his acceptance towards hardship does not come with a passion to challenge the hard time and work hard to get better opportunities.

Meanwhile, There are people with more intellectual mindset, who are highly influenced about their achievements and success in life, typically making good moves to push them away from bad situations whether it is money shortage or a career difficulty, they work hard to get positive alternatives to switch from a bad situation into a good one. As an individual who distinguishes a challenging situation will take this barrier as a room to sharpen his problem solving skills and try not to give up, while keeping the best out of him.

I personally believe at certain times, there are conditions where a person needs to accept a situation for a short period, while looking for the effective and possible solutions to resolve that particular hurdle with enthusiasm and willfulness.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views—accepting a bad situation versus trying to improve it—and provides a clear personal opinion in the final paragraph. The ideas are generally relevant, but the development of the arguments is somewhat limited and lacks robust supporting examples. For instance, the example provided of a person who dislikes their salary is somewhat repetitive and does not fully illustrate the broader socio-economic contexts of accepting hardship. While the position is clear throughout, the reasoning tends to wander into psychological generalisations rather than fully exploring the prompt's focus on jobs and money. Consequently, the task response aligns well with a Band 6.0 descriptor, where all parts are addressed, but some arguments remain slightly under-developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement, dividing the response logically into views for acceptance, views for improvement, and a personal conclusion. However, paragraphing is somewhat problematic; the body of the essay is compressed into only two overly long, dense paragraphs, which places an unnecessary burden on the reader. Furthermore, cohesive devices are occasionally faulty or mechanical, such as starting sentences with 'Meanwhile, There are...' and using ambiguous referencing pronouns like 'it' and 'its' without clear antecedents. There is also a lack of smooth transitional markers between sentences. These issues in paragraph structure and cohesive control place this criterion firmly at Band 5.5 to 6.0. Given the successful overall logical progression despite these mechanical flaws, a Band 6.0 is appropriate.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common lexical items such as 'unsatisfied workplace', 'intellectual mindset', and 'problem solving skills'. However, there are noticeable inaccuracies in word choice and collocation throughout the text. For example, phrases like 'poor cash' instead of 'financial hardship' or 'low income', and 'keep going in the pace of life' are awkward and unnatural. Additionally, there are minor slips in grammatical forms of words, such as using 'unsatisfied' instead of 'unsatisfying' or 'dissatisfying'. While these errors do not severely impede communication, they demonstrate a lack of precision that prevents the lexical score from reaching Band 7.0, making Band 6.0 an accurate reflection of the student's word use.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some ambition with relative clauses and participial phrases, such as 'Among these conditions, people likely convince themselves to accept it as its written in their fate...'. However, grammatical accuracy is weak, particularly regarding run-on sentences, comma splices, and punctuation errors. Many sentences are overly long and grammatically tangled, such as the opening sentence of the second body paragraph ('Meanwhile, There are people...'). There are also missing auxiliary verbs and incorrect contractions or possessives (e.g., 'as its written' instead of 'as it is written'). Because the frequent grammatical and punctuation errors require the reader to occasionally re-read sections to grasp the intended meaning, the performance fits the Band 5.0 descriptor closely.

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