Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

I strongly agree that it is good to accept a bad situation, which is unsatisfactory job or save of money. Rather believe that it is good to try and improve such situations.

First of all, many countries people join unsatisfactory jobs because they have experience. There are serveral situation people join useless work, such as acceptance gives peace and stability. For example, mental health issue doing work busy mind reduce stress and anxiety. There are bring happier and more claim and relax. Moreover, pratical stable which is trying to improve is risky. If you leave a bad job, you may become unemployed. Accept keeps financial security. However, improve is better such as people doing job as a emplyed worker. They put more effort but it is bad job and less money. Because they just need any experience and improcing own self that's acceptance this type of job. In addition success and growth. Acceptance bad job that's reason trying improve and learning skills and applying for better job makes you successful.

Furthermore, build confidence such as acceptance bad job enhence confidence. For example, every day you conversation different types of individual built you confidence and you speak more confidently. Otherwise, motivation and progress all successful people improved thier bad situation. If you are poor and you can do extra work, start small business and gives useful idea.

To conclusion, acceptance bad job is improve

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response attempts to address both views and provide an opinion, but it falls short of fully developing the ideas due to significant linguistic barriers and under-length writing. The Length Check authoritatively notes that the response contains only 233 words, failing the 250-word minimum requirement. Consequently, a penalty has been applied to Task Achievement. While the writer mentions both accepting a bad situation and trying to improve it, the arguments are frequently obscured by unclear phrasing, such as 'acceptance bad job that's reason trying improve'. The position is discernible, but the ideas are underdeveloped and repetitive. This corresponds to a Band 4.5 level of task fulfillment, rounded to 4.5 based on the limited development and word count shortfall.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response is divided into paragraphs, but the overall organization and logical progression are severely disrupted by fragmented sentences and weak cohesive ties. Phrases such as 'First of all', 'Moreover', and 'In addition' are used, but they fail to connect ideas smoothly because the underlying sentences lack grammatical completeness and clear semantic links. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is faulty and mechanical. For instance, the transition from discussing job acceptance to building confidence feels abrupt and disjointed. Referencing is often unclear, such as 'that's reason trying improve'. Overall, the organization lacks a clear, logical progression throughout, fitting the Band 4 descriptors.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The lexical resource is basic and repetitive, with frequent word choice and collocation errors that often strain the reader. The writer relies heavily on simple words and produces awkward collocations, such as 'save of money' instead of 'shortage of money' or savings, 'serveral situation' instead of several situations, and 'pratical stable' instead of practical stability. Attempts to use more advanced vocabulary, such as 'unemployed', 'confidence', and 'motivation', are undermined by incorrect grammatical forms like 'enhence confidence' or 'improcing own self'. Errors in word formation and spelling are frequent and impede communication in multiple places, aligning the response with Band 4.0 descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that are heavily flawed. There is a persistent lack of control over basic clause structures, subject-verb agreement, and verb tenses. Examples include 'There are bring happier and more claim and relax', 'Because they just need any experience and improcing own self that's acceptance this type of job', and 'To conclusion, acceptance bad job is improve'. Errors are frequent throughout the text, often distorting the meaning and making large portions of the essay very difficult to understand. This performance matches the official descriptors for Band 4.0, where errors are frequent and pervasive.

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