Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Some individuals argue that, it is best to accept a bad situation, like as an unsatisfactory job or lake of finance. while other believe that they want to improve their situation. In this essay i will discuss both view and give my own opinion about this topic.
On one hand people think that they accept those how can happen with because they argue that its occur in his fate. In addition some people think that than they asked for their boss to increased their salary or for promotion. This boss can ask to leave this job such as many poor people work in farmhouse and live a poor life because the lake of confidence.
On the other hand, some people argue that they want to improve their lifestyle and asked for promotion for their boss. Because they know that they play a significant role in his company, without this a company cannot run out. Secondly if think that salary of this job is not satisfied they apply for another job, For instance my brother get job firstly in a small factory but he think that his salary is not according to their work they apply to one more factory in Gujrat, nowadays he become earn 100,000 per month with extra charges.
In my opinion people want to improve their skill and want to apply in big industries for better jobs, in this way they live a better lifestyle, one more reason they want to apply for their children life, For example my cousin start a job in bank as a casher and improve their skill and now he became manager of bank.
In conclusion, people want to improve their career and lifestyle with getting skill and apply for promotion because it is important for our family lifestyle.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views (accepting bad situations versus trying to improve them) and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited and at times unclear. For instance, the first body paragraph attempts to explain why some people accept bad situations due to fate or fear, but the phrasing like 'This boss can ask to leave this job' is confusing and under-developed. The examples provided, such as the brother in Gujrat and the cousin in the bank, are relevant to the idea of improving situations, but the overall depth of argumentation aligns best with Band 5.5, rounded to Band 5.0 due to frequent lapses in clarity.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, including an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward referencing and sentence construction. Cohesive devices are used mechanically or inappropriately, such as 'Secondly if think that salary' and the sudden shifts between ideas without clear signposting. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs is weak, often leaving the reader confused about the connection between sentences. This performance reflects Band 5.0 characteristics.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with noticeable errors in word choice and spelling that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'lake of finance' instead of 'lack of finance', 'casher' instead of 'cashier', and 'become earn'. While the writer attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'significant role' and 'lifestyle', the frequent inaccuracies in collocation and word formation mean the lexical range is limited and minimally adequate, fitting the Band 5.0 descriptor.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The essay displays a very limited range of structures with frequent grammatical errors. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures are often faulty and ungrammatical, such as 'Some individuals argue that, it is best to accept a bad situation, like as an unsatisfactory job or lake of finance. while other believe that they want to improve their situation.' Punctuation and capitalization are also problematic throughout the text. Errors frequently cause difficulty for the reader in deciphering the intended meaning, placing this performance firmly in Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 based on positive marking of communicative intent.
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