Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
It is thought that numerous individuals believe on that situation ,where they live in that atmosphere with bad time or environment.More likely ,it is narrated that alot of individuals who suffer in those moments can deal with there own self badly.According to my opinion,those individuals who suffer from that situation having trouble in there life.
For example,when someone needed job or money to manage their own expenses.They get their job but the employment they achieve ,not satisfy their mind and also their own life.Furthermore, they can gave their will to become honest to their employment they obtain.
To illustrate, the other individuals argue that it is better to try best in their work or achievement.In they achieve not a good but not a bad employment ,therefore they have to do better and try crucial things to maintain their work.
In my opinion,it is greatest oppurtunity for numerous people who achieve there goals in there life.They have to manage numerous things at the same time of their life.
Consequently,in my experience ,i read and noted alot of individuals in my life, where they dont accept even there employment or any oppurtunity thay achieve in their life.But,instead of doing complain they felt fascinating and interesting things in their lifes.If any other individual met with him/her ,they feel to improve their own life .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts to discuss both views regarding accepting or improving a bad situation, but the ideas are underdeveloped and the arguments are difficult to follow due to severe language limitations. The student provides a personal opinion, but it lacks clear development and coherent support. Furthermore, the response falls short of the required word count, containing only 221 words compared to the minimum of 250 words. This under-length impacts the overall fullness of the task response, leading to a penalty under this criterion. The prompt is only partially addressed because the examples provided are convoluted and fail to clearly illustrate the opposing viewpoints.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The organization of the text is hindered by disjointed sentences and confusing paragraph structures. While some basic cohesive devices like 'Furthermore' and 'To illustrate' are attempted, they are often used incorrectly or inappropriately, leading to a lack of logical progression. Paragraphing is attempted, but individual paragraphs do not contain clear thematic units or logical sequencing of ideas. Referencing (e.g., pronouns like 'they' and 'their') is frequently ambiguous, making it hard for the reader to determine who or what is being referred to throughout the essay.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and restricted. Throughout the essay, the student relies heavily on simple words and imprecise phrasing, such as 'bad situation', 'bad time', and 'good but not a bad employment'. There are frequent inappropriate word choices and collocations (e.g., 'gave their will', 'try crucial things'), which severely strain the reader's understanding. The lexical range is inadequate for an academic task, preventing the writer from conveying precise meanings or demonstrating control over less common lexical items.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak, with a very limited range of structures. Most complex sentence attempts are faulty and contain severe structural errors. There are persistent errors in basic grammar, punctuation, and word order, such as missing articles, incorrect prepositions, and faulty verb tenses (e.g., 'when someone needed job', 'they dont accept even there employment'). Punctuation is also misused throughout. These frequent errors impede communication significantly and mean the writer has not demonstrated control over simple or complex sentence forms.
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