Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Many individual argue that it is necessarily good to acept every detrimented situation, especially inadequate employment or marginal of money, others believe that improving such situation is the best way, Although best jobs prefer to every person but I agree with every type of jobs, even a bad employment because sometime jobsopportunities minimum for local community.
On the one hand, Jobs are essential parts in the life for every individual.Some students graduates by the completing of Bachelor or M Phil degree, appropriate jobs are minimum for every students, so they can face diffulties in their life. If they may joins bad jobs in the start, it well gains a valuable profits from it and after that the may also change their jobs with a compartible one. For example, some students or local community people struggling to finding jobs at the start, some students want to join every jobs and then litter it will replaced by good one.
On the other hands, appropriate employments prefer for every person to start it. Some scholars have a beg chsnce to go to a higher post, like teaching, doctors and engineers but it may have a lot of compitition. These types of opportunities only open for knowledgeable and mort intelligent students because almost test is mandatory for thest type of employment. For instance, etea, NTS and FDS are organization which mainly take test from scholars.
In my opinion, both are important because in modern days, Jobs opportunities are minimum and always have more compitition.
In conclusion, although good and notable jobs are best option for all individuals but I agree with that students or citizens that have no availability of a good jobs, so bad jobs opportunities important for everyone to join it in the start of the careers.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses both views regarding accepting bad situations versus trying to improve them, and it provides a personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited and at times unclear due to expression issues. For example, the writer mentions that job opportunities are minimal for the local community, which is a relevant point, but the explanation meanders into student graduations and specific organizations like NTS without clearly contrasting the two philosophical views in depth. The position is stated but remains somewhat simplistic. Consequently, the response aligns best with Band 5, as it addresses the task but with under-developed ideas and a partially obscured stance.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is organized into distinct paragraphs, including an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by poor transitions and confusing links between sentences. Phrases like 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hands' are used, but the subsequent sentences often fail to present a coherent contrasting argument. Additionally, referencing is frequently unclear; for instance, pronouns and demonstratives like 'these types of opportunities' do not clearly point back to a well-defined antecedent. Overall cohesion is mechanical and inadequate, placing the response firmly at Band 5.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with noticeable errors in word formation and choice that occasionally impede the reader's understanding. Examples include 'detrimented situation' instead of detrimental situation, 'marginal of money' instead of shortage of money, and 'litter it will replaced' instead of later it will be replaced. The writer attempts some less common items such as 'compatible', but spelling and collocational errors are frequent ('jobsopportunities', 'compartible', 'compitition', 'thest'). This range and accuracy level corresponds to Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The essay demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures are almost invariably faulty, featuring severe structural and punctuation errors. Examples include 'Many individual argue that it is necessarily good to acept...' and 'If they may joins bad jobs in the start, it well gains a valuable profits...'. Subject-verb agreement errors, tense confusion, and incorrect modal usage ('may joins', 'well gains') occur throughout the text. These frequent errors cause significant difficulty for the reader, matching the Band 4 descriptors.
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