Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

few individuals thinks that accepting worst situation is a good like as finicial problem, bad job but some think that do hard work to overcome such conditions. i strong belive that human have a inteligent mind which can overcome any dificult situations.

these days mostly peoples strugling with their finicial problems and job related issues so these factors eddect them mentaly and create a huge stress for them and there family also. they work ten hours plus in a day and in the end of month they dont have any money left for savings or for shoopings while in offices more work load means more strees by the boss for example if we talk about student life even they dont have such type of problems but they also takes strees because of strict teachers and hihg competition in studies nad in job sector .

on the other hand individuals who are strugling such type of situations belive that its part of life so life is not that easy people need to sovle there own problems no one come to get them out of it, for instance they need to join apply for those jobs in which they feel happy and relax maybe they got less salary in the end of month but atleast they fell fresh and happy also tey try to do more than one job to over come there expences which will help them in there further life to make a habbit of hard work

in conclusion, every individual have there on problem but their is many ways to solves them so belive on your self and do hard wo

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response attempts to address both views discussed in the prompt regarding accepting a bad situation versus trying to improve it, and includes a personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited and superficial. For instance, the student states that 'most peoples struggling with their finicial problems' and mentions working ten hours plus, but the ideas are not fully extended. The discussion on students taking stress due to strict teachers is somewhat tangential to the core prompt about unsatisfactory jobs or money shortages. The position is discernible at the start ('I strong belive that human have a inteligent mind'), but overall development suffers from under-developed points and a lack of clear supporting examples from personal knowledge or experience. These limitations place the response comfortably within the Band 5 descriptor, where the task is addressed only partially and ideas remain limited.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response is divided into paragraphs, which is a positive structural feature. However, the overall organisation lacks clear logical progression. Cohesive devices are either missing, repetitive, or inaccurate. For example, transition phrases like 'on the other hand' are used, but sentences run together without adequate punctuation or linking words, creating 'run-on' structures, such as in the second paragraph where multiple ideas are lumped into a single block of text without periods. Referencing and substitution are also frequently faulty, making it difficult for the reader to follow the exact train of thought. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is weak. These characteristics align with a Band 4 or 5; given the basic paragraph division and attempt at linking, a Band 4.5 is rounded to 4.0 or 5.0—specifically Band 4, where information and ideas are not arranged coherently enough to ensure smooth progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The lexical resource is basic and repetitive. The student uses simple vocabulary such as 'bad situation', 'job', 'money', 'hard work', and 'happy'. There are frequent spelling errors that interfere with readability, including 'finicial' (financial), 'eddect' (affect), 'mentaly' (mentally), 'shoopings' (shopping), 'strees' (stress), 'hihg' (high), 'nad' (and), 'sovle' (solve), 'teys' (they), 'expences' (expenses), and 'habbit' (habit). While there are a few attempts at less common words like 'unsatisfactory' (implied in prompt) or 'intelligent', the pervasive spelling and word-choice errors strain the reader and restrict the lexical range to a level that clearly matches Band 4.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the essay. The response relies on simple and often heavily flawed sentence structures. There are persistent errors in subject-verb agreement and tense consistency, such as 'few individuals thinks' instead of 'think', 'human have' instead of 'humans have', and 'every individual have there on problem'. Punctuation is largely neglected, resulting in long, unpunctuated sentences containing multiple clauses. Complex structures are attempted—for instance, using subordinate clauses with 'because of' or 'while'—but they are almost always marred by structural and grammatical inaccuracies. Frequent errors cause significant difficulty for the reader, placing the grammar score at Band 4.

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