Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, people try to do their best in every situation no matter what is happening around them. They are trying to improve their ability, skills and knowledge.

Some people believe that it is way better to accept a bad situation, such as unsatisfactory jobs or shortage of money rather than try and improve such situations.

Once a wise person said that "Try try again till you succeed". So, for the better situations people try again and again, they motivated themselves to do even better. They improve themselves learn from their mistakes for the best outcomes.

Firstly, unsatisfactory job is the worst thing that can happened. People work hard, share their ideas being loyal to their workplace but at the end they did not get enough salary and shortage of money is the mani reason for this. Some companies offers good salary packages, trips, commissions, activities and many more things which makes people feel satisfied but if it is not like this they feel unsatisfied, tired, stressed and frustrated which can make them under confident and less valuable.

Secondly, many people visits other companies and offices gives interviews at different workplaces and try everywhere to improve their situations. They learn new skills, advanced technology, and built confidence for the new challenges they will face in future but after these conditions they will get everything which they are giving efforts for their better future.

Overall, I think that it is much better to give such efforts and try again for the completion and futher success in their lives.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response5.0
Coherence and Cohesion5.0
Lexical Resource5.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.0
Overall5.0

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses both views regarding whether to accept a bad situation or try to improve it, and the student presents a clear position in the conclusion by stating that it is better to give efforts and try again. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and lacks depth. For instance, the discussion of an unsatisfactory job touches on salary and stress, but the arguments are repetitive and lack specific supporting examples from real life or broader knowledge. The prompt is addressed, but the extension of ideas remains basic, which places the response securely at Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The text demonstrates some overall organization with basic transitional markers like 'Firstly' and 'Secondly', and a concluding phrase 'Overall'. However, paragraphing and logical progression are weak. The introduction is disjointed, and the body paragraphs mix different concepts without clear thematic separation—for example, paragraph four discusses job dissatisfaction, while paragraph five discusses visiting other companies, but the logical link between these points is unclear. Cohesive devices are sometimes mechanical or inaccurate, and referencing is occasionally vague, resulting in a Band 5.0 performance.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task, featuring common phrases such as 'bad situation', 'good salary packages', and 'better future'. There are noticeable lexical errors and awkward collocations, such as 'mani reason' (many reason/main reason), 'companies offers', and 'built confidence for the new challenges'. Attempts to use less common items result in inaccuracies that occasionally cause some difficulty for the reader. Therefore, a Band 5.0 is appropriate for lexical resource.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writer uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, though attempts at complex structures are frequently faulty. There are numerous grammatical errors throughout the text, including tense inconsistencies ('People work hard... at the end they did not get'), subject-verb agreement issues ('Some companies offers'), and incorrect prepositions or verb forms ('gives interviews', 'they will get everything which they are giving efforts for'). These frequent errors can cause difficulty for the reader and reflect a standard typical of Band 5.0.

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