Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as unconfortable job or maney crisis and other prople argue it is good to try to change situations.In my opinion change the situation devloped the future.
I am argue that there are some reason if people are did not try to such situation than they can not grow infront such as many crisis people do not try to change money problame than they stay same place they can not go infornt try make money learn new think try to do new job every people life one time face bad sisuation if people cros ta the bad situation than,they won the life'' in adition people they do not try new think then people loos they are own life every day fell riggrad so my opinon is argue that change the bad situation try to do new think.
another site people belive that if you are not able to do somthing new than you accept bad situation ''why'' people born to do new think if you join the unconfortable job then chagne the job try to join new jon such as you are banker you try to join islame bank but you can not join it,you join the ucb bank you try to change the job you try to join islami bank there are lots of brance you try one by one,i belive you one day you join islame bank,but if you accept the bad situation then you are loser. In addition some people have money problem mone problem creat when you accept the bad situation then you must have money problem other wise noting in my opinion you must try you best do not accept bad sitiation.
in conclosion people try to chnage bad situation yes people must do it bus if uyou accept bad situation you loss in my opionion change the situation won your own life.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses both views regarding whether to accept a bad situation or try to improve it, and the writer provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat repetitive. For instance, the discussion around changing a job or dealing with money problems is simplistic and lacks depth or broader context. Examples are given, such as switching from one bank to another, but they are overly specific and underdeveloped, tending to over-generalise. The position is maintained throughout, but the reasoning often circles back to the same basic premise without fully exploring the implications of accepting versus challenging adversity. These characteristics align closely with the Band 5 descriptor.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay has an overarching structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, progression is frequently impeded by a lack of basic punctuation, capitalization, and sentence boundaries. Sentences often run together without proper conjunctions or full stops, making the flow disjointed. Cohesive devices are basic and repetitive, such as 'in addition', 'another site', and 'in conclusion'. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within paragraphs is faulty due to unclear referencing and abrupt shifts in thought. Overall arrangement shows some organisation, but the lack of cohesive control places this at Band 5.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple terms like 'bad situation', 'money problem', and 'new think'. There are numerous spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'unconfortable' for uncomfortable, 'maney' for money, 'infornt' for in front, 'loose' for lose, 'riggrad' for regret, and 'conclosion' for conclusion. While the writer attempts less common vocabulary, the high frequency of lexical and spelling errors causes noticeable difficulty for the reader and sometimes impedes communication. This performance matches the Band 4 descriptor.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text is characterised by frequent run-on sentences, comma splices, and a severe lack of punctuation. There are constant errors in basic verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structures, such as 'change the situation devloped the future' and 'if people are did not try'. Complex structures are attempted, but they are almost always faulty. Errors occur constantly and frequently distort meaning, requiring the reader to guess the intended sense. This demonstrates a level of control consistent with Band 4.
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