Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Certain people consider that it's good to admit a challenging situation, for instance, unsuitable job or lack of money.While others believe that it is better to try enhance these situations. This essay will exams both views but I consider that always do work hard to improve our jobs or any other situations.

To begin with, fewer individuals believe that it is good to accept any situations such as they admit any low salary package job and they consider it's their luck. Furthermore, they don't do any work hard to improver their life style or improve their job ranks.they have lack of money, but they do not work hard to earn more money to secure their future and support their family members.

On the other hand several people believe that, always do hard work to improve life style such as, work hard in jobs first and earn money then invest money on any business like, open grocery shop and invest on open a school to earn more money and improve life styles. Moreover, if they believe when they have start earning they support their family first and improve their houses and buy good clothes and foods for them.

i consider that working hard is only one thing that improve our life style and make our future secure such as, if we are an employment in any particular company it's our duty to do our best and give them good them good result if we give them good efforts then our seniours will be glad with us and give us award and give us promotion too.

In conclusion, always do work hard in any kind situation of your life and start your journey with and always try to improve our position. For instance if we are studing you work hard to obtain good marks and achieve your goals in your life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses all parts of the prompt by discussing both views on accepting versus improving difficult situations and provides the writer's own opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited and sometimes repetitive. For instance, the discussion on why some people accept bad situations relies heavily on general assertions about low salaries and luck without fully exploring the underlying reasoning. Similarly, the opinion section restates the idea of working hard without introducing fully extended supporting evidence or deeper analysis. While the position is clear throughout, the arguments remain somewhat superficial and under-developed, keeping the task response at this level. To reach higher bands, the writer should ensure that each viewpoint is explored with deeper explanations and more specific, well-reasoned examples rather than generalized statements.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The essay displays a basic overall organisation with clear paragraph breaks separating the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. However, there is a lack of smooth overall progression between ideas, and the logical flow is occasionally disrupted by mechanical or inadequate cohesive devices. For example, transitions like 'To begin with', 'On the other hand', and 'In conclusion' are used to structure the text, but internal cohesion within paragraphs often relies on repetitive phrasing rather than varied referencing. Pronoun referencing is also sometimes unclear, such as in the third body paragraph where the connection between subjects and pronouns becomes blurred. To improve, the writer needs to employ a wider and more natural range of cohesive devices and ensure that sentences build logically upon one another to create a seamless flow of information throughout the response.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The writer uses a limited but minimally adequate range of vocabulary suitable for expressing basic ideas about jobs and financial situations. Words and phrases such as 'challenging situation', 'salary package', and 'improve our life style' demonstrate a basic functional competence. However, there are noticeable lexical errors in word choice, collocation, and word formation throughout the text, such as 'try enhance', 'do any work hard', 'improver', and 'an employment'. These errors, alongside issues with spelling and word forms, occasionally cause some difficulty for the reader and restrict the vocabulary to a more basic level. To achieve a higher band, the writer must expand their lexical repertoire to include less common lexical items with greater precision and pay closer attention to natural collocations and word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The essay employs a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying primarily on simple sentences alongside frequent attempts at complex forms that are often faulty. There are persistent errors in verb forms, tense consistency, articles, and prepositions within grammatical patterns, such as 'This essay will exams', 'when they have start earning', and 'if we are studing'. Punctuation control is also weak, with missing commas and run-on structures that can cause difficulty for the reader. The frequent occurrence of basic grammatical errors means that error-free sentences are the exception rather than the norm. To progress, the writer needs to demonstrate better control over complex sentence patterns and systematically eliminate basic errors in agreement, verb tenses, and sentence boundaries.

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