Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is often argued that people should accept such kind of circumstances like having a unsatisfactory work or less salary. On the other hand, such people often argued that it is good to try and improve such kind of situations like having a unsatisfactory ork or less money. In the forthcoming paragraph I shall discuss with a deep detailing on the both argument.

Firstly, I will disagree with the statement that believing in such kind of situation of having a unsatisfactory work or lake of money because if we did not have anykind of interest in that job which we are doing we cannot perform well and the pay is also less. So, we should left that kind of job and try to do that job in which we are often interested. It will play a mojar role in our life because we are doing that kind of work in which we are interested and we can earn more money easily in it because we will perform so good in it.

On the other hand, I will agree with the second statement that if we are stuck in that kind of situation and we want to do that job. So, we should improve ourself by doing that job. We should try more and learn the basic steps of doing that job. After sometime we will improve in our work.

In colusion, Both arguments play a vital role in people life but solving problems is not the last option your interest in it is also play a important role in it.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the task only partially, as the ideas are quite limited and under-developed. The student attempts to discuss both views and give an opinion, noting that some people prefer to accept bad situations while others try to improve them. However, the reasoning is repetitive and lacks extension or concrete examples from the writer's own knowledge or experience. Phrases like 'such kind of situations like having a unsatisfactory work or less salary' are restated multiple times without adding new depth or clear elaboration to support the writer's personal stance. To reach a higher level, the writer needs to fully develop each viewpoint with distinct arguments and well-supported examples rather than recycling the same basic points.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation with a clear attempt at paragraphing, but the response lacks clear overall progression. The introduction outlines the plan, and body paragraphs attempt to tackle different sides of the argument using basic transition markers such as 'Firstly' and 'On the other hand'. However, the flow is hindered by repetitive phrasing and inadequate or inaccurate cohesive devices. For instance, referencing is sometimes unclear, and the mechanical repetition of ideas makes the progression feel disjointed rather than logically advancing. Improving the range and accuracy of linking words, as well as ensuring each paragraph introduces genuinely new supporting points, would enhance the overall structure.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task, with noticeable errors that may cause some difficulty for the reader. There is a heavy reliance on repetitive phrases, such as 'such kind of situation' and 'unsatisfactory work'. Furthermore, there are several word form, spelling, and collocation errors throughout the text, including 'lake of money' instead of 'lack of money', 'left that kind of job' instead of 'leave that kind of job', 'mojar role' instead of 'major role', and 'colusion' instead of 'conclusion'. To achieve a higher score, the writer must expand their lexical range beyond basic everyday terms and exercise greater control over word choice and spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response displays a very limited range of structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty. There are frequent grammatical errors that can cause difficulty for the reader, including persistent issues with verb forms, articles, and agreement. Examples include 'having a unsatisfactory work' (incorrect article usage and uncountable noun handling), 'if we did not have... we cannot perform' (tense inconsistency), 'we should improve ourself' (pronoun error), and 'your interest in it is also play a important role' (faulty verb phrase structure). To improve, the writer needs to demonstrate greater control over basic grammatical patterns and construct complex sentences with fewer errors.

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