Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In recent years, a number of people believe that it is good to accept a bad situation, like unsatisfactory job shortage of money. Other argue that it is better to try and improve such situation. In my opinion it is better to try and improve such situations discuss both views wih my opinion in forcoming paragraphs.

To commence with, the one primary reason is that, handel in difficulties. this is because any problem in our life never give up and accept situation with every problem. For example, a recent survey revealed that, this this more important because difficulty can handle for all the sucsessful person like mukesh ambani that person faced to more difficulty.

On the other hand, better to try and improve such situation this is most important the reason is that, better try to good work or task and improve the changes. This is because solved the problem and improve the perticular skills and knowledge. For instance, a recent study found that, a company employees not conversation to anyone so improve the communication skill and better talk to all the people.

I opine that, try to improve faced situation and work on difficult work and improve the another changes. This is because changes the work and all the difficult so improve the another work hard and faced the difficulty. To exemplify, a recent newspaper illustrates that, the work on difficult situation and improve the skills and all like leadership and team is also very significant.

In conclusion, the reasons are handel in difficulties in every situation. In my perspective, this is better to try and improve such situations like better try to good work or tasks and improve the changes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear preference for trying to improve difficult circumstances, and you include examples in both main paragraphs. However, the discussion of the two views is not sufficiently clear or balanced: the first body paragraph does not explain why someone might accept a bad situation, and instead refers vaguely to handling difficulties. The second view is closer to the task, but its reasons and examples are difficult to follow. The Mukesh Ambani example and the employee communication example are relevant in principle, yet neither is explained enough to show how it supports the argument. Your opinion is repeated in the introduction, a separate paragraph and the conclusion, but it is not developed with a clear reason. Explain each view directly and support your position with specific, connected reasoning.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, separate body paragraphs and a conclusion, so the reader can recognise an overall essay structure. You also use basic signposts such as “On the other hand,” “For example” and “In conclusion.” However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear: the first body paragraph moves from “handel in difficulties” to accepting a situation and then to a success example without showing the links. The second body paragraph similarly repeats the idea of improvement rather than developing a sequence of reasons. Several transitions are mechanically attached to incomplete or confusing statements, and repeated references to “improve such situations” make the essay feel circular. Use topic sentences that state each view, then connect explanation and example explicitly.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits how precisely you can express the task’s ideas. Words and phrases such as “difficult,” “improve,” “situation” and “better” recur frequently, while some choices make meaning hard to understand, including “handel in difficulties,” “good work or task” and “improve the changes.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, for example “sucsessful,” “particular” (written as “perticular”) and “forcoming.” You do attempt topic-related language such as “skills,” “knowledge,” “communication” and “leadership,” but these terms are not always used in natural combinations. Build a more precise range for discussing acceptance, financial pressure, job satisfaction and practical steps to improve circumstances.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response relies mainly on simple sentence patterns, with attempts to add explanations using “because” and examples using “for example.” These attempts often produce incomplete or faulty sentences, such as “this is because any problem in our life never give up” and “better to try and improve such situation this is most important the reason is that.” Subject–verb agreement and sentence construction are also problematic in “Other argue” and “a company employees not conversation to anyone.” Missing or misplaced punctuation, especially commas after introductory phrases and full stops between complete ideas, further obscures meaning. Practise forming complete subject–verb sentences first, then combine them with accurate clauses. Check agreement, articles and plural forms, and separate each complete idea with appropriate punctuation.

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