Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

People believe that is best to accept a bad situation ,such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money because they think they are too much supreme .They have done alot off effort for their career but when they dont get that type of job they get disappoined.The unsatisfactory job demotivates them they do no job and stay home. they think that when they get a proper job accouding to their agricate they will do that.The shortage of money that become the biggest reason for this.

Others argue that is better to try and improve such situations because they are hardworking .They do to much hardwork to achive their goals.Try again make them motivated and one day they achive their goals.I had a paper in my past.and i have done so much efforts for that paper but i did not pass the exams.

I think that is better to try and improve such situation because it make you hard working person. hard work is the best thing for a person who is trying their best if do not sucessfull in first they do more hard work for their goals. Many sucessfull people do not have proper money to start the business but they done small jobs to make their good career.I think people have to start from zero to make their life best future.

In conclusion people who belive that is best a accept a bad situation and do hard work to improve their life circle they became sucessfull .Every person have spirt to accept the bad situation because it keep us motivated and these things help us in the future.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear opinion in the third paragraph that people should try to improve their circumstances, and you refer to both accepting a bad situation and working towards change. However, the discussion of the first view is unclear: the claim that people accept poor circumstances because they are “too much supreme” is difficult to understand, and the job and money examples are not explained sufficiently. Your personal example about failing an exam is relevant to perseverance, but it does not clearly illustrate the wider issue. The conclusion also contradicts itself by saying people accept a bad situation and do hard work. The response is 247 words, so it is three words below the 250-word minimum; 24 words copied from the task prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with separate paragraphs for the two views, your opinion, and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify the main stages of your answer. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow, and links between ideas are sometimes unclear. For example, “The shortage of money that become the biggest reason for this” does not clearly connect to the preceding point about an unsatisfactory job. The conclusion’s reference to people who “accept a bad situation and do hard work” also combines opposing ideas without explaining their relationship. Repeated use of “they” and “I think” makes the writing repetitive. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each example explicitly to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “unsatisfactory job,” “shortage of money,” “motivated,” and “goals.” These choices show that you can communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or misspelled expressions make meaning difficult to follow. “Too much supreme” does not convey a clear reason for accepting a bad situation, while “agr icate” and “life circle” are not appropriate expressions in context. Spelling errors such as “disappoined,” “sucessfull,” and “belive” are also noticeable. Aim to use familiar, precise phrases rather than attempting unclear wording, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, such as “They have done alot off effort for their career but when they dont get that type of job they get disappoined.” However, sentence structures are limited, and frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation sometimes make the meaning hard to follow. Examples include “Others argue that is better,” “it make you hard working person,” and “they became sucessfull.” Several sentences also run together without appropriate punctuation, while sentence openings such as “they think” are not consistently capitalised. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then build longer sentences using clear clauses and correct subject–verb agreement.

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