Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is often argued by some individuals to be stable during poor condition, like not satisfactory job or financial crisis. While others argue that it is better to try hard and enhance that situations.I will discuss both views and give my opinion in upcoming paragraphs.

On the one hand, People who accept any critical situation and stay stable with hope that everything will be fine over time. They work continuously even if they dislike their job or workplace. Sometimes it is hard for them to change job for repeatedly and they unable to settle down so they try to not changing job and working that crucial environment. I think people also survive them selves during financial crisis and health issues because they are not able to find solution and do more work to become stable. In so many countries Worker and middle class people majorly face shortage of money for several times in their life because they unable to get good income and not encouraged to save money for future time. So, they accept the situation and live their life in that particular problems.

On the other hand, individuals who try again to come out of the critical situation and live independently. This type of people may able to get some motivation from somewhere and encourage to improve that situation. I believe that trying to solve problem is far better than accepting situations because the trying is option to get out from that but if they accept situation they have to live with the problem for uncertain time. But if their try worked well and solve the problem they can live peacefully for rest of their life.

From my perspective, I strongly agree with that everyone should try again and make better situation rather than accepting situation for rest of their life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and state a clear preference for trying to improve difficult circumstances, especially in “I strongly agree that everyone should try again.” The discussion of acceptance includes relevant examples such as job dissatisfaction and financial hardship. However, the two positions are not developed equally: the reasons for accepting a situation are somewhat repetitive, while the case for taking action is asserted more than explained. For instance, you say people may find motivation and live peacefully if their efforts succeed, but you do not give a specific example or explain what practical steps could help. Develop each view with a clearer reason and supporting example, and make your opinion explicit earlier. The response meets the task’s length requirement; eight words copied from the prompt were excluded from the count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph for each view, and a concluding opinion. “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” help signal the contrast, and the reader can generally follow your position. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and some links feel mechanical or do not connect ideas precisely. For example, the discussion moves from job changes to financial and health problems without clearly showing how these examples support the same point. The opening sentence of the second body paragraph is also a fragment, which interrupts the flow. Group related reasons together, use clearer references to earlier ideas, and connect each example explicitly to the argument it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “financial crisis,” “shortage of money,” “motivation,” and “independently,” so the main ideas are usually understandable. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or unnatural phrases make the writing less clear. Examples include “stable during poor condition,” “enhance that situations,” and “survive them selves”; these do not express the intended meanings naturally. Repetition of “situation,” “problem,” and “try” also limits precision. Build a more accurate set of collocations for employment and financial hardship, and check word forms and singular/plural choices. More precise phrasing would help you explain the two views without relying on repeated general terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a conditional idea in “if their try worked well,” and you use linking clauses to explain reasons. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence construction, agreement, articles, and verb forms sometimes make the reader pause. For example, “People who accept any critical situation and stay stable with hope…” is not a complete sentence, while “they unable to settle down” is missing an auxiliary verb. In “if their try worked well and solve the problem,” the verb forms do not agree. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and finite verb, then check agreement and tense consistency. More accurate complex sentences would make your reasoning easier to follow.

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