Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays, many people faces different problems in their lives some think that they should accept that bad situation whereas some think it is good to try again and improve that situations. This will discuss in up coming paragraph,I believe that they should fight to that situations

On the one hand, why people accept the bad situation. Firstly, people want their life less stress full so they accept reality. In some situation which are beyond their control in that order they think that accepting that is a sensible decision, hence people live that way not taking to much stress. Moreover, in job sector people avoid to take risk and may continue an unsatisfactory job because they want regular income. If they change a job , it will be lead to financial problems.

On the other hand, they need to try and improve such situations because if they try hard , they will get batter jobs by this they can improve their financial condition and they can also learn new skills. Furthermore, not only people can boost their confidence but also it can gain some personal growth by facing different kind of challenges they can try to solve that problems by themselves as a result this may help them to become independent and confident.

In conclusion, although accepting a bad situation can reduce stress and help people to avoid risk, I believe that making efforts to improve it is a better choice because it can lead to greater success, financial stability and happiness.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both views and give a clear opinion: the opening says people should “fight” difficult situations, and the conclusion explains that improvement can bring “greater success, financial stability and happiness.” The two body paragraphs also provide relevant reasons, including reduced stress and regular income for accepting a situation, and better jobs, skills and confidence for trying to change it. This covers the task well. However, some points are asserted rather than developed: for example, the benefits of learning skills and becoming independent would be stronger with a specific example or explanation of how someone might achieve them. The opening could also state your position more clearly and naturally. More detailed support would make the discussion more fully convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion that restates your position. Linking expressions such as “On the one hand,” “Moreover,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the discussion. The progression within each paragraph is generally logical, moving from a reason to its consequence. At times, however, connections feel mechanical or unclear. For instance, “by this” and “as a result” do not always make the relationship between ideas precise, and the opening’s “This will discuss in up coming paragraph” is an awkward signpost. Use fewer formulaic transitions and make the links between each claim and its explanation more explicit; this would make the organisation feel more fluent.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “unsatisfactory job,” “regular income,” “financial problems,” “personal growth,” and “financial stability.” These choices show awareness of the subject, but the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling, or collocation errors make the writing less natural. Examples include “stress full,” “batter jobs,” “fight to that situations,” and “different kind of challenges.” Some phrases, such as “improve that situations,” are also imprecise. Build a bank of accurate collocations for work, money and decision-making, and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise vocabulary would help you express the ideas with greater flexibility and reduce moments when the reader has to interpret your intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a conditional idea (“If they change a job…”) and the paired structure “not only…but also.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but errors occur across sentence construction, agreement, articles and punctuation. For example, “many people faces” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “This will discuss” lacks a clear grammatical subject. In “it will be lead to financial problems,” the verb form is faulty, and several sentences run together without appropriate punctuation. The complex sentence beginning “Furthermore, not only people…” is difficult to follow because its clauses are not controlled clearly. Practise building accurate sentences around one main idea, then add subordinate clauses and check agreement, verb forms and sentence boundaries.

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