Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Opinion are divided on weather people have to be acceptable about their unsatisfied work which generates low income for their living expenses, other made an assumption that everyone should try their best to make life easier for themselves. I strongly agree that people sometimes have to accept their fate but relying on them and not seeking any positive way out would make their life more difficult and stressed, therefor searching for an alternative ways to reduce bad situation would gradually make their living easier.

On the one hand, its hard to accept that these days most of the people are relying on their job in spite of good income, although they are unable to generate sufficient money from their work people tend to accept reality which is beyond their limits. Its eventually causing them from being getting a good accomodation and a well healthy life. This is mainly due to lack of knowledge and support, their requirement and necessity are on the verge of their income which is affecting them mentaly and physically.

On the other hand, to accumulate considerable esclation in ones life, a person might have to work with their experiance and knowledge without just relying on hard labour. Seeking a new ways to generate income would gradually broden their intellactual thoughts which can plays a benificial role for their income strategies and brings an alternative ways for earning money as a result they might get an opportunities from their own experiance which could be used as their source of income.

In conclusion, i believe that people have to find ways to explore things more without relying on a specific encome basis work. Accepting a bad situation would generally made their life more tougher except trying an alternative ways would bring an aknowledgement about their ways of finding good income source.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You present a relevant opinion: you acknowledge that people may have to accept circumstances beyond their control, but argue that they should seek alternatives. Both views are included in separate body paragraphs, so the response addresses the main parts of the prompt. However, the discussion is only partly developed. The first view is described mainly through low income and its effects, while the second focuses on gaining income through experience and knowledge; neither is supported with a specific example or a clearly explained situation. Your position is also somewhat difficult to follow in places, especially where the introduction says people sometimes have to accept their fate but then warns against relying on that. Explain more precisely when acceptance is reasonable and why taking action is preferable overall.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting contrasting views, and a conclusion. The signposts “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help readers identify the stages of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is not always clear: several ideas are joined into long sentences, and the links between causes and outcomes are sometimes hard to follow. For example, the first body paragraph moves from accepting low income to accommodation, health, and lack of support without clearly explaining each connection. The conclusion repeats the preference for alternatives but does not neatly resolve the tension in the introduction. Use clearer sentence boundaries and make each paragraph develop one main point in a logical sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “sufficient money,” “alternative ways,” “income strategies,” and “mental and physically,” and the reader can generally identify the subject. However, inaccurate word choice, spelling, and collocation are frequent enough to make some meanings difficult to interpret. Phrases such as “considerable esclation,” “broden their intellactual thoughts,” and “specific encome basis work” do not communicate the intended ideas clearly. There is also repetition of “income,” “ways,” and “relying,” which limits flexibility. Aim for accurate, natural combinations rather than more elaborate wording: for example, describe improving one’s financial situation or exploring other sources of income. Proofreading spelling and word forms would also make your vocabulary more effective.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “although,” “which,” and “as a result.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction can make the meaning difficult to follow. For instance, “everyone should try their best to make life easier for themselves” is followed by a long sentence with several ideas joined by commas, while “which can plays” and “would generally made” show problems with verb forms. The sentence beginning “On the one hand” also has an unclear grammatical relationship between its clauses. Practise building shorter, complete sentences first, then add subordinate clauses carefully. Check subject–verb agreement and ensure each sentence has a clear main clause.

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