Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In today's world, to satisfy human needs it is good to do job in high paid work places. Some people believe that it is best to aceepts bad situation such as unsatisfy jobs, opponets argue that it is better to improve situations. I will discuss both the viewpoints with my opinion in the upcoming paragraphs.

To commence with, there are plethora of reasons why individuals accept a bad situation. However, some mutitudes have only one jobs which are suitable for them and comfortable. They provide shortage of money and they also unsatisfy with their jobs. Moreover, many multitues are unemployment in many country's. Individuals feel that one stable job can provide people to stable income and better living conditions because they do not know about other jobs. Workers have only short weekend which their are not stisfy with them.

On the other hand, some individuals believe that it is better to try other jobs and improve situations. A successful career can provide people stable income and better education. It can also help individuals become more independentb and achive their future goals. For insentce a person who works hard and gains new qualification may recieve promation and high sellary. This can allow them to support their family and afforad important things.

In conclusion, it is better ti try new jobs which are people satisfy them,this not good way to accept bad situations of unstisfy jobs. It can negative impact on people

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You introduce both views and state a preference for trying to improve a bad situation, so the response is relevant to the question. However, the discussion is only partial: the reasons for accepting an unsatisfactory job are unclear, and the claim that people have “only one jobs” is not explained or supported with an example. The opposing view is somewhat clearer, with promotion and better pay as possible benefits, but these points are brief. Your conclusion repeats your preference without developing it. The response also contains 232 words, below the 250-word minimum; the eight words copied from the prompt are not counted. Develop each view with a clear reason and a specific example, and explain your opinion more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Transitions such as “To commence with,” “Moreover,” and “On the other hand” help signal the direction of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven, and some connections between ideas are difficult to follow. For example, the point about unemployment is followed by a claim about stable income and then short weekends, without explaining how these details support accepting a bad situation. The conclusion is also abrupt. Organise each body paragraph around one main reason, then explain and illustrate it; use linking phrases to show relationships rather than simply mark a new point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to work and personal progress, including “stable income,” “living conditions,” “qualification,” and “future goals.” These choices show an effort to discuss the topic beyond very basic terms. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices, collocations, and spelling errors make parts of the response difficult to understand, such as “unsatisfy with their jobs,” “high sellary,” and “independentb.” Some words are repeated, particularly “people,” “jobs,” and “situations.” Build a more reliable set of topic phrases and check spelling and word forms. For instance, use “dissatisfied with their jobs” and “earn a higher salary” to express these ideas naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You use some simple sentences and attempt longer structures, including “because they do not know about other jobs” and “A person who works hard and gains new qualification may receive promotion.” This shows an effort to connect ideas and use a relative clause. However, grammatical errors are frequent, and some sentences are difficult to interpret. Examples include “it is good to do job in high paid work places,” “some multitudes have only one jobs,” and “which their are not satisfy with them.” Articles, agreement, verb forms, and sentence construction need more consistent control. Practise writing clear subject–verb sentences first, then add subordinate clauses, checking that each clause has a complete and grammatically accurate structure.

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