Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In recent years , people are facing difficuty to find jobs related to their field and interest. As Ai is taking most of the tasks , so its an alarming situation for mankind financial situation. Most people are now fond of this situation and rely on their unsatisfactory job and little wages. But those who have motivation in their lives and know how to dream bigger , accept the challenge and get it also argue with others. According to my view unsatisfaction is a sin. There is no task in this word that a human can't perform. AI is taking our tasks but upto a limit. Major fields are already open for the one who is willfull , competitive , present minded and know how to deal with conditions.

Shortage of money is biggest problem than having no skills. but people didn't understand that these skills are the key for money. They rely on others but not polish their skills.

For example, if AI is taking our jobs , thre is already a person who lookafter all the results , modify them , give all the prompts and deal in a well manner with AI. So if AI is taking job , it is also creating more jobs because we do jot rely on machines for bigger decisions.

I conclude that those people who argue in this situation are better than the others who lose their hope and just blame the system and other people , instead of hard work and polishing their skills.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear preference for trying to improve difficult circumstances, especially in the conclusion, where you favour people who keep working and developing their skills. The discussion of AI and employment also provides a relevant example. However, the task asks you to discuss both accepting a bad situation and trying to improve it, and the first view receives little explanation: you say people “rely on their unsatisfactory job and little wages,” but do not explain why accepting circumstances might be sensible or what benefits it could bring. Your own position is also expressed in broad claims such as “unsatisfaction is a sin,” rather than being carefully justified. Develop both perspectives and support your opinion with more specific reasoning.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an identifiable opening, supporting points, an example, and a concluding opinion, so the reader can follow its general direction. However, progression between ideas is uneven: the opening moves from job shortages to AI, then to motivation, without clearly setting out the two views in the question. The paragraph beginning “Shortage of money” introduces a new point but does not connect it clearly to the previous discussion, and the example about AI repeats an earlier claim rather than extending the argument. Linking phrases such as “But,” “For example,” and “I conclude” are used, but the relationships between ideas are sometimes unclear. Organise the response around the two views, then state and support your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “unsatisfactory job,” “shortage of money,” “motivation,” and “polish their skills,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or unnatural choices make parts difficult to interpret, such as “fond of this situation,” “argue with others,” and “unsatisfaction is a sin.” Spelling and word-form errors, including “difficuty,” “willfull,” and “thre,” also reduce clarity. Aim for precise expressions that describe the two positions rather than relying on broad or emotionally strong wording. For example, explain that some people may accept a situation for stability, while others seek better employment or financial security.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use clauses to explain reasons and examples, as in “if AI is taking our jobs, there is already a person who…” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make several sentences awkward or unclear. For instance, “As Ai is taking most of the tasks, so its an alarming situation” combines structures incorrectly, while “people are facing difficuty” has an incorrect verb pattern and “those people who argue in this situation are better” has an unclear grammatical relationship. There are also problems with articles, agreement, and punctuation, such as “Shortage of money is biggest problem.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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