Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Some people are of the opinion that one should accept unsatisfactory circumstances, while others believe that it is better to try and improve situations like this. I strongly believe that one should never give up and try to improve his or her situation.

People argue that always trying to get more and more out of a stituation simply makes people greedy. Always being unhappy of one's situation and trying to get more leads to people choosing unfair means, regardless of how it would effect other people. For instance, a person having financial difficulties might start robbing other businesses without thinking how it might effect the owner and employees. However, just accepting a bad situation and not trying to improve reduces human's drive to thrive. Without trying to get better and better people might get stuck in the same routine, which takes away their purpose and individuals might fall into depression or anxiety. For this very reason, a lot of community centers are established where old people can work on different projects for orphanges and hospitals after their retirement.

Another benefit of trying to improve every situation would be modern inventions. Without people's drive of get better and trying to have maximum outcome from every situation, we might not have many innovations. For instance, if wright bothers never tried to fly, we would not have an airplane that has made travelling so easy and less time consuming. In addition, there are a lot of great role models in every industry, who were unsatisfied with their jobs and left them to become who they are now. If they had accepted those situations we would have never been able to see them. For example, a very beloved Punjabi singer named Aminder Gill was a bank manager. If he had not left the job he was not satisfied with, we would never have such great music pieces.

In conclusion, although always trying to get better and to improve one's situation might make people greedy but it's benefits like new inventions and role models for young people to look up to, outweighs it's disadvanteges. Which makes me a firm believer that people should always try to improve their situations.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both views and state a clear position: you argue that people should try to improve their circumstances. The discussion of acceptance is relevant, especially the point that constant striving can encourage greed or unfair behaviour, and you support your view with examples of innovation and a singer changing careers. This meets the task well, but the two sides are not developed equally: the case for accepting a bad situation is brief, and the community-centre example does not clearly explain why acceptance may be beneficial. The examples about the Wright brothers and Aminder Gill support ambition, though their connection to ordinary unsatisfactory circumstances could be made more explicit. To strengthen the response further, explain when acceptance might be sensible and develop that view before weighing it against your own position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, paragraphs developing the arguments, and a conclusion that restates your opinion. Ideas generally progress from the risks of constant striving to the benefits of trying to improve, and examples help illustrate the points. However, the first body paragraph combines several distinct ideas—greed, unfair behaviour, loss of purpose, and community projects—so its focus becomes less clear. Some links are also mechanical, particularly the repeated use of “For instance,” “For this very reason,” and “In addition.” The final sentence beginning “Which makes me…” is a fragment and does not connect smoothly to the preceding sentence. Group related points more tightly and use clearer references and transitions to make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a range of vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “unsatisfactory circumstances,” “financial difficulties,” “innovations,” and “role models.” These choices help communicate the main ideas, and the examples give you opportunities to use topic-specific language. However, several word-choice and collocation errors reduce precision, such as “unhappy of one’s situation,” “drive of get better,” and “maximum outcome.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “stituation,” “effect” where “affect” is intended, “wright bothers,” “orphanges,” and “disadvanteges.” These do not prevent understanding, but they weaken control of vocabulary. Check spelling carefully and learn common word partnerships so that your ideas sound more natural and exact.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex structures, including conditional sentences such as “If they had accepted those situations…” and clauses introduced by “while” and “although.” This gives the response some variety, and the main meaning is generally clear. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly in agreement and sentence construction. For example, “it’s benefits … outweighs it’s disadvantages” has a plural subject with a singular verb, while “Which makes me a firm believer” is an incomplete sentence. The conditional “if he had not left the job … we would never have such great music pieces” also shifts awkwardly between past and present forms. Review subject–verb agreement, possessives, and complete sentence boundaries, then proofread complex sentences to ensure their clauses fit together accurately.

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