Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Many people face difficulties in life such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money, and opinions differ based on experiences. Some school of thoughts maintain that people should accept their fate, while critics contend that by continuous hardwork, people can improve. This essay will examine both perspectives before arguing that, in most cases, it is wiser approach to try and improve.

In an era of rising costs and competitions, it is hard enough to secure a good job, so if a person gets a job with less income, atleast, it prevents immediate distruption to family and basic needs. Moreover, it gives a sense of relief and emotional peace of having something instead of nothing. It also reduces the social pessure and stress. Especially, fresh graduates often get less paying jobs with more working hours. That said, it gives experience and increase their growth, so it's good to accept it. For instance, when I graduated, I secure a job in a startup company with only Rs. 10,000 but I accepted this unsatisfactory job due to social fear and in order to get expereince.

On the other hand, while social anxiety is valid but is should not be an insurmountable barrier. A person can never afford the rising expenses if he sticks to a bad job. In today's modern world, it is necessary adapting with new advancements, learning new skills, switching careers for more growth. It opens door to high quality of life and more personal fulfillment.

In conclusion, I belive that accepting an unsatisfactory job should be limited to a situation, but finding new career opportunities should never be stopped becasue it gives you more confidence and self-esteem.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both views and state a clear preference for trying to improve difficult circumstances, especially in the introduction and conclusion. The reasons for accepting a poor job—immediate income, security, and experience—are relevant, and your personal example makes this side concrete. You also explain that changing careers and learning skills can improve living standards. However, the two sides are not developed equally: the case for improvement is brief and would benefit from a specific example or explanation of how someone could make that change. The conclusion also focuses mainly on jobs, although the prompt includes financial hardship more broadly. The response meets the task’s length requirement; nine words copied from the prompt were excluded from the count. Develop the less-supported points to make the discussion more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The essay has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Signposting such as “On the other hand” and “In conclusion” helps readers follow the argument, and the personal example is placed appropriately within the paragraph about accepting a job. The progression is generally logical, but some links between ideas are abrupt. For example, “Especially, fresh graduates…” is not smoothly connected to the preceding point, and “That said” introduces a concession whose relationship to the claim that accepting the job is good could be clearer. The second body paragraph also moves quickly from social anxiety to expenses and career changes. Use clearer transitions and develop each paragraph’s central point before moving to the next.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the topic, including “unsatisfactory job,” “social anxiety,” “personal fulfillment,” and “self-esteem.” These choices communicate the main ideas, and some less common expressions show an attempt to discuss the issue precisely. However, several spelling and word-choice errors reduce accuracy, such as “hardwork,” “distruption,” “pessure,” and “expereince.” Some collocations are also unnatural: “some school of thoughts” and “opens door to high quality of life” would be clearer in more idiomatic forms. “Rising costs and competitions” is imprecise in this context. Check spelling carefully and learn common word partnerships; this will make your vocabulary more natural without requiring more complicated words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including conditional reasoning (“if a person gets a job…”) and a concession (“while social anxiety is valid…”). Most of the argument remains understandable, but some grammatical errors occur in both sentence structure and verb forms. For example, “it is wiser approach” needs an article, “it gives experience and increase their growth” has an agreement problem, and “while social anxiety is valid but is should not…” combines conjunctions awkwardly and contains an incorrect pronoun. “In today's modern world, it is necessary adapting…” also needs a different grammatical pattern. Review articles, subject–verb agreement, and structures after “necessary,” and proofread sentence boundaries and punctuation. More consistently accurate complex sentences would strengthen control.

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