Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

in life, everyone face many difficult situation like bad job or lack of money.some people believe that it is better to accept a bad situation while other believe we always try to best improved them ,this essay will discuss both veiws and aegue that trying to improve better.

on the one hand some people believe that is best to accept a bad situation is a good idea.this is because everything is not our control.

for example if one dont like this jobs but her needed money for his family so try to best this jobs new ideas and skills imporve for this money.

also, some time trying to change things can be risky and creat many problems face in his life, so for some people acceptance is a safe choice.

on the other hand , i believe that is better try to best improve difficult situation when we try improve new lrean and skills for jobs if someone unhappy for jobs so try to improve skills for online course and part time jobs or small business part time . in case not better high benefits but allways try improve skills at the end better outcome. many people workhard to change their life usually become more succesful life for long run.so always people believe yourself.hardwork not waste your time and money coming future is better outcome.

in conclusion,although accepting a bad situation can sometime bring peace. i think try to improve it is better option beacuse it leads to growth andsucces

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and make your preference for improving difficult circumstances clear, especially in the opening and conclusion. The response also gives relevant examples, such as developing skills through online courses or taking part-time work. However, the discussion is only partly developed: the acceptance argument is mainly that circumstances are outside one’s control and that change can be risky, while the improvement argument relies on broad claims about hard work leading to success. Explain these points more fully—for example, when acceptance may be sensible and how a specific effort could improve someone’s prospects. Your position is present, but it would be clearer if stated consistently and supported with more precise reasoning.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph for each view, and a conclusion. Phrases such as “on the one hand,” “on the other hand,” and “in conclusion” help signal the main stages. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, particularly in the second body paragraph, where skills, online courses, part-time work, business, and future outcomes are joined without clear explanation of their relationships. Some linking is mechanical or repetitive, and punctuation makes several ideas run together. Organise each paragraph around one main point, then explain it and give a focused example. Clearer sentence boundaries and more precise references would make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “accept,” “improve,” “skills,” “risky,” and “outcome,” so the reader can identify the main ideas. However, the range is limited and several word choices or combinations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes meaning difficult to interpret. For instance, “try to best improve” and “better outcome” do not express your intended ideas naturally, while “new ideas and skills improve for this money” is unclear. Spelling errors such as “veiw,” “imporve,” and “succesful” also reduce clarity. Build a bank of accurate phrases for discussing employment, financial pressure, and personal development, and check spelling and collocations when revising.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a conditional idea beginning “if one don’t like this jobs” and a contrast introduced by “although.” However, control is limited: errors in subject–verb agreement, articles, pronouns, and sentence construction occur frequently and can make the reader work to understand the message. For example, “everyone face many difficult situation” and “some people believe that is best to accept” lack accurate agreement or sentence structure. Several ideas are joined without clear punctuation, as in the long sentence beginning “on the other hand.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using clauses such as “because,” “although,” and “if.” Check agreement, tense, and sentence boundaries carefully.

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